Radio Silence - Comments, page 2

OMG, I totally missed that. XD I guess because they're both pronounced the same? LMAO. I wasn't really paying attention.

@Nanook
How did you not point out that I wrote 'excepted' instead of 'accepted' in my comment? Now I'm cringing inside. How did I even do that?

lol. XD Hey, that covers both ways of writing, at least. XD
:D

@Nanook
I'm so bad at this whole British/American English thing that I'll sometimes even use the same word spelled both ways twice in a sentence... At least people don't really frown upon it at my school because both are excepted. For my important school work, though, I'm trying to keep it to one. BUT IT'S SO DIFFICULT. I've learned so many things in so many different ways.
Oh, I'm totally going to use that idea now. Thanks for the input xD

Ooh, I didn't think about the punctuation being different between both. XD Ugh, this is where things get confusing. XD But yeah, I understand you feeling that way; I always had the mindset too before learning it was the other way for American English, lol.
And totally understand; up to you what you choose to do, but it's just something that struck me that could work and help with explanations, lol.
And yay! :D

@Nanook
I don't mind tattoos one bit, I actually admire them. Other people, however, are not like that at all, sadly.
So many mistakes, just like I expected XD
That punctuation inside the quotation actually isn't wrong when used in British English.... Which sucks, because I'm writing this in American English. It's my great education from both British and American teachers showing through xD. It really doesn't seem right to me to put that full stop inside of the quotation marks unless it's an actual sentence. I literally get goosebumps.
I feel like adding a random family member will make it seem too much like I'm purposely adding it to make more sense of things, but I have an idea for it all to make sense. Wait... I just got a better idea that could let me add your extra family member idea as well.
Vibrations and music coming up soon. I have it written down, no worries. I just didn't have a smooth transition into it yet until now ;)

:O
First of all, I will never understand people that automatically judge a person for having tattoos. I understand that some people don't prefer them, but that's the thing, it's not like someone is telling them they have to get them themselves! Like it's totally a person's choice. Like, it's honestly like looking bad upon someone if they have a scar, really. While they both have different causes, it's just a part of a person.
Sorry, I have tattoos so I just don't get it. And even when I didn't have them, I didn't judge; just saw it as their choice.
And not to say this would give them reason, but someone like Alex, for example: a friendly face! Like, it's not like he's scary or something, lol. But again, even if a person is intimidating with tattoos, it doesn't make them a bad person. Sigh.
Anyway, as for the rest of the chapter...
I'm loving the narrator in this chapter. XD They got extra sassy I feel, haha. It was pretty entertaining.
Hmm... so, a few things to point out.
Some of these are a bit debatable, especially these first few:
But it wasn’t a good to be happy about.
Here I'm not entirely sure if this was a mistake or if maybe it just takes a certain way of reading it. Were you referring to "good" like a noun? If so, it makes sense for the "a" before it to be there, but if not, it obviously doesn't. Just wanted to double check with this one.
Alex had just gotten out of his car, I vaguely described the weather to fit his mood, bla bla bla.
I found it a bit odd that you spelled it "bla, bla, bla" as opposed to "blah, blah, blah." This one may be based off of preference, but I more often see it used with an "h" on the end. As I type this comment, it's giving me the typo underline when I put bla. Lol. So idk. XD
He immediately looked at where it came from and saw a woman cursing, surrounded by groceries on the floor and holding two now empty plastic bags that were ripped at the bottom in her hands.
The word "floor." This, I have seen used with many English writers, like, British English. XD However, in American English, we use "asphalt," since I'm assuming this is taking place outside in a parking lot? Or like, we describe the ground more as opposed to saying "floor" if it's outside. On the sidewalk, grass... you get the point. XD I find it very odd when "floor" is used, because it makes me think of inside, and I'm pretty sure that's why it's not used in American English. XD So I guess this one is optional to revise. It depends on the type of writing you want to stick with.
Yet she still asked, “is there any way I can repay you?”
"Is" would be capitalized since it's going into a quote. Getting into grammar here, woot. XD Think of it as separating narration from the quote as well. Perhaps you knew this though; I can't remember if I've seen this type of thing from you before or not, hmm...
The one thing going through the woman’s mind was ‘of course’.
The quote mark after "course" would be outside of the period, as opposed to before it. I know it's always tempting, but that's typically the rule.
“So, do you know what she likes?” The woman, whose name Alex did not know and was probably never going to know asked before they started looking at what was available.
Place a comma after "know," to better pace the sentence but also to separate your descriptor, if that makes sense. Ha, kind of what I just did in that explanation sentence. XD
“Well, now I doubting all my choices,” Alex groaned, his eyes now scanning over all the other colorful flowers.
Think you can figure this one out. XD But also, briefly after that:
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‘I’m just going to buy those carnations and pray my girlfriend has a similar reaction.
Got a weird beginning quote mark going on here.
Was this why she never wanted him to met her parents? Was this why she always acted like the didn’t understand the hint?
*meet, and "like *she*" I think you meant to put. XD
“Did I do something wrong this morning?’ He questioned,
Again, weird quote mark, at the end this time. But also, since the "he questioned" is simply a continuation and doesn't stand on it's own as a sentence beginning, I think you un-capitalize that? I know it's the opposite with the capitalizing in the quote thing... don't even get me started, lol.
He was used to there always being people of the internet having something to say,
This one is just my personal thought, but I think it may be better to say "on the internet" because saying "of the internet" makes it sound like they're solely just a part of the internet? You know, like robots or something. XD Or like they don't have any life outside of that... which, arguably, a lot of people say, but that's obviously exaggeration. XD But it's not completely confusing to say this, so debatable.
“Not while he’s here with Riley, are you insane!”
Since this is kind of a question, you could maybe put "?!" instead of just an exclamation point. Debatable, though. Although it just seemed a bit off to me with just an exclamation.
I think that's all. Again, some of these aren't even truly major, but debatable, but just thought I would point them out to think about.
I'm hoping Riley's parents kind find some steady footing, and maybe Casper can talk some sense into them. :/ To totally shun Alex is completely unjustified. So you'll probably get into this, but maybe a bit more on their background on why they think like that. Why they're steadfast on being against the aspect of Riley dating (which you may find to be the actual whole problematic factor for them, as opposed to simply disliking any potential boyfriend's profession)?
Maybeee... an undiscussed family member could come out of the woodwork? I could totally see that happening, but I'm not sure if you find that too farfetched of an idea? Like, maybe they had a sister where something bad happened? Whether that be she died or she ran off and doesn't speak to them anymore, and comes back and starts drama, for Riley and/or Alex? HOLY CRAP. XD lol. You told us to suggest ideas so here is my next one apparently. XD
But it would totally make sense. Maybe her sister ran off with a rockstar and that's why her parents completely despise them. Or maybe a rockstar ruined the sister's life in some way, and so the parents don't want the same thing happening to Riley.
Could TOTALLY see this. But up to you.
But anyway, overall, great job with this chapter! Again, loved the sassiness from the narrator, and I love how it went from 0 to 100 in drama by the end. lol. It started off pretty innocent, and then everything just kind of went up in flames.
Oh, and again, I still encourage the idea I mentioned many chapters ago about Riley getting into music, with the whole vibrational listening and what not. Make her contribute to interest in the relationship and Alex's interests, you know. :)

@Newyork_xo
The trouble has doubled

Damn. I thought we were making progress now that her brother was on board. But her parents are even worse!!

Ah :/

@Nanook
I can deal with ten words for creativity, but not a ten-word reflection for a whole project that took three days.

Oh, okay, that makes sense. XD But still, a bit rough for you guys. And they're getting paid for it! So c'mon now. XD
That sounds like a poem, in all honesty. A short poem, but like trying to say something in so little words just reminds me of that. Like, describing something in 10 words could definitely get your creative mindset going.

@Nanook
It's mainly so that examiners don't have too much to read xD They all have to grade hundreds of papers, so it only makes sense that they don't want us to write essays and reflections that go on and on. 50 characters is still a bit too much, though. You can't even say anything with like ten words!

OMG. :O lol, the characters can give you practice for Twitter, at least. XD LMAO. That's what that honestly sounds like. I can understand teaching you conciseness, but for everything? That's kind of a lot. :/

@Nanook
Yeah, the problem is not having enough words. Everybody always goes waaay over and then has to cut down like 6000 words. We have to get as close as possible to 4000. Like, you have to be above 3500. If you go over 4000, they will stop reading at the 4000th word and get downgraded because it means you were able to stay concise. I feel like I'll go over so much that I'll then cut down on too much and have to write more again xD Theyre very specific with word limits here. If you go over, they stop reading. Like, once we had to write a 50 character reflection. Not words, characters! Of course the teachers also think it's bullshit, but it isn't up to them.

lol, I love how you mention a subject I didn't even mention, it's great. XD
Oh, okay. 8 pages isn't too bad, you can do it girl! Between you and me, I would write a 12 page paper in a night with some of my classes, tbh. XD The procrastination was horrible. XD But it was possible, and you still have a few weeks... although I can understand the pressure of multiple assignments at once.
But wait, you can't go over? That's kind of stupid. And not really fair either. It has to be exactly 4,000 words, or just in the ballpark or close to it? Like how do you get exactly 4,000 words though... seems difficult if that's the case.
:/

@Nanook
Well, I'm no good at geography either.... but that one wasn't listed either. Some people in my class are actually taking the SATs because they want to go to an American university.
Pages? I don't know... I'm guessing one page is about 500 words... which would make 8 pages? Doesn't sound like much when I put it that way... And it isn't much at all, actually. If you go over, you get downgraded, though.
The past years was just grade by grade, the last two years are combined. Don't ask me why, they just want to do it that way.
If I have to write anything for school, I don't like it as much anymore. But that's how it is for most things.

Oh gotcha. XD
And lol, you would rock the SATs then if history is your only rough subject. They're only Math, Reading/English/Grammar (idk how you would classify it), and I think just recently they added the science component. There wasn't any history when I took it.
Haha, your procrastination sounds like me. XD How many pages is that? We usually go by pages for our assignments as opposed to words.
And ohhh interesting.
End of year tests? That sounds exactly like what finals are lol. But really? We just go year by year for grades in each class... they don't carry over next year (but they affect overall GPA though).
XD That's what writing used to be for me. :D It still kind of is but after having to write a novella for a grade this year... it's kind of discouraged me lol. :/

@Nanook
I'm technically not a native speaker... well, yes I am... my nanny used to speak English to me as a baby because I was born in a foreign country xD
I feel like I'd rather do SATs... they make getting into universities way easier. But then again, I can deal with all subjects except history... History just makes me fall asleep unless it's actually something I find interesting. Like, I don't mind getting my historic facts right for a story. I've researched so much about 19th century America for a story I started ages ago and just haven't worked on in months.
Everybody in my class right now is freaking out. Deadlines are creeping up. In three weeks I need my 4000 word essay first draft finished. I haven't done shit.
You don't have to go to graduation at all since it's so late and stuff. Some people go off to America or Australia and it's kind of expensive just to fly back and forth.
I don't have finals yet, I just have (what they call) End of Year tests this year. Next year will be finals/exams. It just sucks that all our graded assignments are what affect our grade next year. If I fuck up my essay this year, it will bring down my final grade at the very end of next year no questions asked.
I keep thinking of taking a break, but I can't do it. Writing is just so fun to do. I keep coming back despite having mental breakdowns about my homework load xD

Oh gotcha. Lol. I'm so in the dark with how it all works. Because that's what you're working with, but then others will say different and so it gets confusing on who's a native speaker or not. XD
And yeah, that's basically how the GPA thing works, although it's not as drastic... like, getting one C doesn't take you down to half, but it does bring it down a few points and again, makes it hard to climb back up and near impossible to get a 4.0 ever again.
Oh, I see what you're saying now. That's lame that it's different, and not fair on the different country scales. That kind of makes me think of the SATs and ACTs, and how you have to have certain scores to even be considered for a school. And they're standardized tests so it's honestly bull, because just because someone isn't great at math, doesn't mean they're not intelligent enough to get into the place. Like half the time you don't even need math depending on the major or what you go for!
And oh gotcha. But still, your hours are seriously rough and honestly make me question how they're able to do that. :O
And yeah, that sounds really forced and sad. :/ Do you have to go to the ceremony though to graduate? We don't necessarily have to here. Or well, in college anyway; my high school may have required it but I can't remember since it's been a while lol.
And aw, I'm sorry; I understand that feeling. When finals come around, all of my professors did the same thing, not just for tests, but for projects, presentations, etc. And I was like, really? You couldn't have at least spaced them out a bit. Like they would make deadlines on the same days, before finals week even depending on the class, and it was just insane.
If your break does have to happen though, I totally understand. School comes first and sometimes you just gotta do what you gotta do. You've been dedicated to writing, more so than I've seen other people lately, so you'd definitely be okay to finally take a break for a bit. You've been consistent so I commend you for being able to keep it up for so long.