You Leave Me with a Dangerous Taste - Comments, page 2

@Nanook
Holy shit this is a long comment and it's going to take me ages to reply. (I'm pretty sure I won't finish in time for me to go to school. Let's see the time I started was at 7:40 am and I finished at that does mean )
I do feel like Jack's a little naive right now. The affair was spread over around 6 months, that's a shit load of time, and he's still okay with it. Now to annoy you even more with my ending, maybe there's a reason why his so 'cool' with it? Maybe he had been cheating as well???!!! WHAT THEN??!?!?!?
Now your wondering things. I'll number them as well.
1) I forgot people in America practically sue each other over everything xD That never even crossed my mind. But I'm not sure about him doing anything. He seems so certain that Paisley will come back that if she never does, it will just ruin his entire ego and deflate him completely to the point he doesn't want anything to do with her anymore.
2) Yeah, a shit load can happen with her record deal. At least she said no to Alex when he directly offered, or she would have been in some deep shit if he wanted to get back at her. I could totally make a sequel... if I wanted to. I feel like turning this into the generic rom-com plot where one guy fucked up and wants to get back at the girl (or the other way around) just doesn't fit with this story. Totally up for you to make it though ;)
3) Definitely realistic for a toxic relationship, but it doesn't seem like they were in one. But maybe that changes from now on?
I mean, I did say who Paisley though the father was. You know what they say, often a mother's instinct is right. I have a feeling I need to put a definite end to that by writing an epilogue. So, for your later worry, it isn't all that ambiguous. I guess the only thing that would be left out is that whole idea you had with Alex being super jealous. Also, I feel like it would be quite a short epilogue, not like my 'usual' long ones.
Those mistakes, though xD I definitely had corrected some of those. When I nearly finished editing, I accidentally removed a sentence and automatically hit 'command z'... not a great idea on this website (which I know and have done other times as well). What it does is it removed everything in the text box because the 'last' action was me pasting the chapter in it. And then you can't get it back. Not even with the trusty redo button. So... I had to restart and totally did skip over some of it xD
As for Paisley being so stupid for not thinking of Alex as maybe being the father, I actually understand it. Obviously she knew that it was possible, I'm pretty sure most people know how unprotected sex works. But she most definitely was in denial. She had already made her choice, wanting to be with Jack, even though she was so unsure when she found out she was pregnant (the reason being their low incomes and it possibly hindering Paisley's career, meaning even more financial problems). So, if Alex was the father, then it brings complications to her relationship with Jack. It would be pretty suspicious if some blonde kid suddeny popped out xD At least now Jack can prepare for that possibility, though. Anyway, my point is that she wanted the perfect life with Jack even though that would never be possible.
You can already feel that Alex was going to be a fling from the beginning. It was nothing but excitement and sexual attraction from Paisley's part. Always being the good girl makes you want to do something bad.
Tell me your honest opinion when you read that other story. I'll understand if you don't want to continue reading it, but I will most definitely miss those comments. As for the views, not all of my most recent stories get many views xD I recently wrote a one-shot that's been practically ignored by everyone. The only way I can really get my stories to be read is through my loyal following (aka you) by hyping them up for weeks and then posting a new story. Didn't do that with the one-shot. But now I know the strategy, I guess ;)
I'm going to wait for a few more reactions before I decide to do the epilogue or not. If more people are annoyed and want to know more, then I'll definitely write it. If they all think this is the right place to end... then I guess you'll never know ;P

GIRL. Okay, my response to your last comment will be mixed in with this review of the last chapter.
OH MY GOD. Also... heheheheheeheheeehe.... XDD
WTF just happened. I'm like, not even sure how to process this.
Umm... okay, well, I'll mention the things I am happy about first. Okay:
1) Thank God she told them both she's pregnant. I would've flipped if she kept it from one or the other. XD
2) I'm glad Paisley was finally able to tell Alex how she feels. Or well, I'm not happy about that happening, exactly, but... I'm glad she finally spoke her mind, I guess? Good for her, seriously, when she struggled to do it this whole time basically.
3) Holy shit, even though I didn't want it to end this way... Jack's reaction, man. That deserves a million gold stars, seriously.
Okay, now, the things I'm still wondering about:
1) Will Alex do any sort of retaliation? Sue her for possibly having his child and not letting him have contact? Confront Jack and tell him off? With his attitude, I find it a bit hard to believe that he'll just completely let it go and not talk to her again. Which leads to my next point:
2) What will happen with her record contract? I know Alex isn't directly connected as like her new manager or anything, but... I can't help but think he is still somewhat involved, and can't totally disappear from that aspect either. So... what happens there? Again, I don't see him just totally letting this go. lol, and I know you said you had no plans for a sequel, BUT... I'm gonna just leave this thought here anyway: Paisley marries Jack, she has the kid but works on her record deal. Alex is awkwardly there but still loves her and tries to win her back. He wants to know if the kid is his, and I could just see a sequel of her working on her career while Alex pesters her and causes all sorts of drama, maybe "moves on" to make Paisley jealous, as another idea... just some thoughts I wanted to leave here. :))))
3) The point you brought up... can Jack just easily let it go? I can't help but wonder if tensions will arise, and if he can ever fully trust her again. The fact that he forgave her so easily... was noble, but realistic?
lol, girl, I TOLD YOU NOT TO END THIS WITHOUT TELLING US WHO THE ACTUAL FATHER WAS. I SWEAR to God. XD You already had another story end this way! I mean, you don't just want to do the exact same thing again, do you? I didn't take you as that type of writer... *lifts face in air* XD XD
lol, am I making this final chapter comment epic like I planned? I hope so. :D
Anyway, I would definitely not be opposed to an epilogue. :) However, please don't write one if it's still gonna be ambiguous. lol. Like what's the point in that case. XD Might as well just stop here.
Hmm... okay, spotted quite a few things girl, I guess the hype for writing this final update threw you off a bit. XD
“Alex…” I sighed, lightly pushing my hand against his chest to put definite space between us. “We need to talk.”
“Sure, what’s up?” I asked as he sat down on one of the barstools.
I was confused here because you made it sound like Paisley was answering her own comment? LMAO.
He managed to snap out of him, running a hand through his hair. “You’re really pregnant?”
Snap out of him? Snaps for Alex! Bring on the snap cup! XD lol, idk if you get this reference. XD
Hell, though, before I get to the next one, another thing I wanted to mention: the fact that Alex was already planning the nursery colors. LMAO. WTF, even I was creeped out by this part. XD Like Jesus Christ he's thinking so far ahead, even more than Jack and her's relationship, lol.
“Yeah, sure, run to that twat again. You’ll soon figure out that he can give you anything that I can give you.”
Okay, so if Jack can give her anything Alex can give her... what's the argument he's trying to make here? XD
“What’s wrong?” Jack ran to me, worried about what was going on, and immediately was next to me on my knees as he tried to calm me down by holding me tightly.
Okay, this one may or may not be a correction, I'm just wondering... so Paisley was on her knees? Or Jack got down next to her on his own knees? It could go either way, but if it's the second way you meant to do, obviously 'my' should change to 'his.' Again, might have just over-analyzed this one, lol.
“I fuck up, I fucked up real bad.” My breathing was still very irregular and I could feel pain start in my side from not getting enough oxygen.
The beginning of this quote... I guess it makes sense if she was struggling to say it at this point, but was just wondering if this was supposed to be "I fucked up" mentioned twice as opposed to the present tense. XD Know what I mean? But again, she was struggling to talk at this point, so the error also makes sense in that case.
Okay, now... hmm... I suppose I will check out your story then. :P Give me a bit to catch up with it, I might get to it tonight although I'm not sure. But I will put it on my list to read. :)
And yes, I totally think that's worth celebrating! lol, idk, I think it's good, compared to a lot of other stories' views I've seen. More of the new, recent stories don't get those kinds of views. :)
And lol, the sarcasm in the last line of your comment... YES, you can be gentle if you put your mind to it. :P lol.
*Wonders if I've set a record in comment length... hmmm* XD
But okay, overall recap of the story since this is potentially all for it: I really, really loved this story. Even though Alex was a bit of a psychopath, I had trouble seeing that since I'm a bit biased toward him, I'm sorry. XD Jack deserves more credit. I'm happy that Paisley got the ending she kind of wanted I guess? And that Jack wasn't a complete douche-canoe and that he actually took the time to understand and still loves her even after what she did. That says a great, great maturity about his character and is seriously awesome. But side-note, still annoyed at the fact that Paisley was completely convinced the baby's his and didn't even consider it could be Alex's! C'mon girl, how naive can you be? I'm not even going to excuse age, either; the pulling out method was definitely explained in one or two health classes I took in high school. XD Like really. XD That's not necessarily something you only learn from actual experience (and I definitely haven't had much, confession hour! XD).
Anyway, yeah, even though I'm not totally happy with how it ended, I can understand it and the realistic side of it. Alex was never much more than a fling. Dammit. XD
So, great job overall with this story! You already know you're an amazing writer, I don't need to tell you that. :) I love how you paid attention to details, and, your sort of open-ending aside lol, you did answer and clarify a lot of things throughout, which is definitely not the case with all fan fic writers. You definitely know how to write stories. :)
Okay, so, that all being said, I'm glad you enjoy my comments girl, because that's why I leave them, to put smiles on faces. :D And inspire writers to continue. From when I used to write on Mibba, I know what it's like to not get feedback, so, that's why I try to whenever I can. :)
Gonna miss this story. It was a good one. Here's to... a possible epilogue? lol. Onto trying to read your other story now. XD :P

@Nanook
I already told you it was going to be a semi-open ending ;) You'll just have to wait and see what I mean with open. There might be an epilogue, but definitely no sequel.
Well, you can't exactly vote, the decision was made before I planned out all the chapter xD But you can have what you hope for. But I already know that you will choose Alex no matter what.
You need her to tell Jack about him? How about telling Alex about Jack? He still thinks he's the only one so intimate with Paisley.
I live for your comments, I don't get why people would ignore them! I would never not answer anybody, but I guess some people don't feel the same way.
Yeah, Rumours Ruin Reputations. It only has 10 chapters right now, no need to read over 100 chapters. Just give the first 10 chapters a try and see if you like it. I won't be writing another Alex story for a while except for We Are The Rebellious Youth.
I couldn't have you guessing the entire plotline xD Now I can say and prove that I never forget about the method of birth control ;) I'm not that forgetful.
Still, a semi-open ending. It's up to everybody reading if they want more information or are cool with what they get to know.
It's quite a difficult thing for Paisley, but it obviously has to come to an end very soon.
Is 3000 views worth celebrating? I don't even look at that anymore xD Compared to my other stories, it isn't all that high, but then again the others do have more chapters. It's halfway to Dear Sister, which has ten more chapters than this one right now. Although I do feel like this story is more popular? It's confusing. People's reactions count more than views. I'd rather have a few invested readers than many who check it out.
Do you really think I can do gentle??? Are you sure???

OH MY GOD.
OKAY, so, before I respond to your last comment.
Girl, think about this. Think about this. *Makes snapping noise to the left to distract you* XD
I swear TO GOD if you end this like your other two-shot, where we don't find out who the father is... -_________-
I swear to God. DO NOT DO IT. I KNOW IT IS TEMPTING. DO NOT DO IT.
.... unless you plan on writing a sequel. ;)
lol, I have like tears in my eyes from excitement, is that normal? XD Like, I'm just laughing maniacally on the inside... I can't. XD
Whew, okay, back to regular feedback now.
I vote she picks Alex so he can actually provide for her! OOOOOOHHH. Is that a burn? Yes, it is a burn, because I don't want Alex heartbroken! Okay? Okay. I've picked an official side for sure now, screw it. XD
But on a serious note, c'mon, I need her to tell Jack about him. Like, for sanity reasons. I do still kind of feel bad for him. Goddammit.
Okay, your last comment:
LOL, girl, begging. XD I kind of like it. ;) But really, it means so much that you enjoy my comments, because I swear I'm leaving more and more these days on stories and they go unanswered. :( It depresses me a bit.
But... mmmm.... wait which story are we talking about now? Rumours Ruin Reputations? I think that's it. lol. Thought you were asking me to catch up with your other Jack series. I just took a gander at that and there's so many chapters OMG. XD
But I admit the Rumours one has a plot line that intrigues me... I may look past the Jack aspect and check it out. I used to read original fiction all the time, not just Alex fics... so I could do it, right? XD
OMG, I didn't even think about the emotionally abusive part.... shit. :O Hmmm... maybe I retract my stance on who she ends up with then. XD But.... but it's Alex. :(
Haha, I see how you tried to deviate me now. LMAO. Medical reasons... uh huh. Sure sureeee. XD
Ugh, I hate when you make good points. Stop. XD
*Continues to snap to distract you* XD
Literal tears. WTF is wrong with me. Not out of sadness, really. I'm borderline insane right now (but really, to seriously analyze this, this happens to me when I get pretty addicted to/into a story. You can check out my comments on PurpleOctober's story Destroy Rebuild for further proof of that, lol).
Okay, to wrap up this feedback: do not given into temptation girl, of leaving this too open-ended. XD I cannot if we do not find out who the actual father is. How about this... the results of this last chapter will determine if I read your other story that you want me to read? Does that sound fair? I actually think it does. XD But dammit... that sounds like blackmail... I mean I don't want to influence your choices for this but... XD
... sigh. XD I'm sorry. Ugh. This chapter did a number on me. IT DID A NUMBER. XD Because while I'm feeling somewhat victorious for guessing what would happen, I'm sad too because of the position this puts Paisley in. Because now not only does she have to figure out what she personally wants more, she has to consider the kid as well. Dammit. :/ Despite my taking of sides, I do want the main character to be happy, believe it or not. :P Because if this ends sadly, then I'm sad.
But anyway, woo, okay, great job with the update! Intense one for sure. Most intense one for me, clearly. Congrats on over 3,000 views on this, by the way! That's seriously impressive and we should celebrate! :D
Looking forward to/kind of fearing the final update. Be gentle, please. XD

@Newyork_xo
She breaks up with both, steals William and lives a happy life with her two sons, no man there to trick her (except her boys who play peekaboo).

@aweirdkindofyellow
Ughhhhh. I don’t know!
If i haaaaaave to answer I’m gonna say she stays with Jack but I’m not at all confident with that answer. So maybe I’m saying she goes with Alex? It’s tricky!

@Newyork_xo
I have ;) I have from the start. I'm just trying to confuse you.
But, before I put out the last chapter (and finish writing it) you can choose one last time. Based on the latest chapter and everything before, what do you think?

@aweirdkindofyellow
I honestly haven’t made a decision on who I think she is going to choose. I go back and forth. Some times I feel like she’s going to choose Jack because of their past and she loves him and he loves her and he so sweet and oblivious to everything. But then I think she’s going to choose Alex because of their possible future and and he loves her and I’m pretty sure she maybe loves him too and he’s kind of the opposite of Jack in that he’s kind of a dick and can read Paisley pretty well.

@aweirdkindofyellow

I'm super excited. D:

@Kurrsteee;
It will be so soon. And the drama will start immediately in the new chapter (haven't started writing it yet, but I know what's going to happen).

@aweirdkindofyellow

oooh, yes. I'm subbed to that too, so I'll be there to see!

@Kurrsteee;
I will always mention that stuff (as you can find out in my story Rumors Ruin Reputations, which I'm planning on starting up again after the last chapter here... no, it's not self-promo, it's me providing evidence ;) )

@aweirdkindofyellow

Exactly, it's common enough that it wouldn't be weird, but still uncommon enough that you'd mention it if it were a medical thing.

@Newyork_xo
Everything happens for a reason in my stories ;) your suspicions are nearly always correct.
I'm just wondering if you're also correct about who she will end up with. I'm wondering it about everybody.

@Kurrsteee;
I've been on it myself since I was thirteen for medical reasons, but I would have specified that if that were the case for Paisley.

Oh snapppp! I had suspicions she would get pregnant but I didn’t say it because I wasn’t totally sure. Oh damn. This is going to be an interesting ending for sure.

@aweirdkindofyellow
Oh, I'm with you on that. It doesn't take much to just fit it into the story somewhere, but it makes way more sense for Paisley not to be on it anyway since she was a virgin. It's not that common for people to be on it for other reasons.

@Kurrsteee;
Well, I'm glad not everybody started pointing out that I never mentioned a method of birth control xD That would have ruined even the smallest bit of surprise. I was just trying to write like many people do who put "they used birth control" in their notes, only I never put it in my notes ;) (also, I never get it when people do do that. Honestly, just write an extra sentence in the chapter, it's not that difficult to do)

@aweirdkindofyellow

It's not really surprising, I just didn't really think about it until she was pregnant. Obviously it makes sense.
And, still sorry not sorry - I'm not trying to make them Ross and Rachel, I swear!

@Kurrsteee;
I was going to apologize, but now that I read your update I'm not going to do so anymore. I'm beating you at your own game!

Honestly, though, is this really that surprising? (Wait... which part is surprising to you?)