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Alex moved to Baltimore a few weeks ago and is now starting school. It was love at first glance when the boy next door is assigned to lead him around school.
The new kid in town who is attempting to leave his past behind and start new. New school, new year, new Alex.
The boy next door who has some secrets that haunt his past. When he meets a new kid he hopes these secrets don't come out.
I'm about halfway through the first chapter, and I really like it so far. The one thing I've noticed that's a repeated problem is your punctuation and capitalization. Please please please fix it! It makes it really hard to read and meanings can be misconstrued without correct punctuation.
Uhm, I don't really get it? Why was Alex ignoring him and pushing him off when he still wants to be with him? Is there something going on that he won't tell?
I finished the first chapter! I'm definitely interested to continue reading!
A few criticisms:
Try to explain things a little more. Don't worry too much about something seeming too drawn out, there's a purpose behind every word.
When dealing with multiple guys, as a reader, it can be hard to keep track of them all. Especially in the scene where Alex dragged Zack out of the room for a personal moment, using names more often can be really helpful.
Off to the next chapter!
12/12/17