It's Nothing Personal (rewritten) - Comments

I finished the first chapter! I'm definitely interested to continue reading!
A few criticisms:
Try to explain things a little more. Don't worry too much about something seeming too drawn out, there's a purpose behind every word.
When dealing with multiple guys, as a reader, it can be hard to keep track of them all. Especially in the scene where Alex dragged Zack out of the room for a personal moment, using names more often can be really helpful.
Off to the next chapter!

I'm about halfway through the first chapter, and I really like it so far. The one thing I've noticed that's a repeated problem is your punctuation and capitalization. Please please please fix it! It makes it really hard to read and meanings can be misconstrued without correct punctuation.

Uhm, I don't really get it? Why was Alex ignoring him and pushing him off when he still wants to be with him? Is there something going on that he won't tell?

Aw poor Jack, no, you're lovable enough and. Alex likes you for real!

Oh so I don't remember the original story although I have probably read it ;) but I really like this version! Keep the chapters coming!

Yes let's keep the happiness make them alllll better and happy c:

yes yes, very nice i love, keep it up good ._.
i swear if something bad happens >.>

YAS NICE VERY CHAPTER MUCH APPROVE WOW
SO NICE

Nuuuuuuuuu );

I love you because long chapter but I hate you because WHaT hAVe YOu DoNEEEEE

@Jagk Skellington
That's why I update weekly instead of daily. I put in 8-10 hours on each chapter but it's all worth the reactions I get in your comments.

dude your chapters are so long and fantastic and filled with drama it's just an emotional rollercoaster I love it.

Woah. That was awesome cx

WELL THAT WAS UNEXPECTED

ok WUT I was not expecting this

dudddddddeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I love this story and this chapter is the cutest yet saddest thing omg

This is so AWESOME! LIKE AHHHHHH! I hope Jack tells Alex about his past with drugs and his attempt. Or he doesnt tell him and gets into drugs again and brings more drama xD

anyways! This was awesome! Update soon! (:

@JagkBarakitten

oh it's not always horrid. I am 14 and I still love Christmas. I know where you're coming from with the whole hating family thing trust me. just try to have fun with it. I like to hang out with friends and watch christmas movies on Christmas eve. make the best of it.

i used to love christmas but since im 12 it sucks so bad to HAVE to be around my family :c i still like christmas eve though
poor maddi

omg i wouldnt like to have step sisters cause well i do have and meh