Breaking the Silence. - Comments, page 3

Oooh okay, thanks for clarifying! :)
Great job with the new update! Short, but sweet, what with Sam and Alex's mom bonding a little. :) A thing to note, Alex's mom spells her name "Isobel." It's not that big of a deal but just something to note. It's your piece of work so you could even keep the other spelling if you want.
I hope Alex wakes up. :( Aw. It just happened but I miss him being awake already.
Interested in seeing what's next in store. :)

@Nanook
Annalise is Zack's girlfriend. Thank you so much!


@RosesNWriters
thank you so much, it's kind of the relationship me and my brother used to have!

I like the dynamic between Sam and Jack - it’s really endearing!

Oooh... so a lot happened in this new update. :O
Hm... who is Annalise? Like, one of the guy's girlfriends... Jack's girlfriend? Well, whoever she is, we just know she's definitely an antagonist lol. She was so rude to Sam. :/ Wondering her backstory a bit though.
I love how Alex was quick to defend Sam, though. :)
But oh no... it went from a normal chapter to chaos all at once. :O Poor Alex; I hope he wakes up and is okay, as much as he can be anyway. :( Sam had another breakthrough with speaking though. :) I like the component to it that you had another traumatic event get her to start speaking more again. It just kind of show's a balance in the 'why' of what she goes silent, and then how it brings her out of silence... if that makes sense, and then it also sounds logical for the plot line as well. I'm not sure if you put a lot of thought into the technical side of writing as you were writing this, but it's interesting how that counter to the original event seemed to naturally come about. So maybe you did think about it a bit. :) The therapy session could possibly be part of that counter as well.
Idk if that even made sense, but long explanation short: I love the thought put into this, even if it wasn't intentional. But I'm sure you planned it. :)
Great job with the update! I also love how Sam has a pet snake. That's unique; I don't think I've ever read an ATL fic when the OC had a pet snake. So it's interesting how you went with that. :)
Interested in seeing what happens next. :)

..... little whispers is something but Lex!

Oh my God what... I'm so curious about this story. It's very good so far, Alex is treating her so sweetly and it's so fluffy and cute. I like the older brothers best friend situation; it's a very real thing. Can't wait for another update.

OMG what. :O
How in the world did she survive that? Not only stabbed, but shot three times?! An angel must be watching over her. :'(
But great job with the update; something to note: you might want to put *Trigger warning* or something, some type of descriptor, either at the beginning of the chapter or in the summary part of the chapter on the home page, that way readers are aware and can prepare themselves for the content. Thankfully, I'm not affected by this sort of thing, but it's concerning if someone's also been through this, because it may affect them differently.
That's my only note though, when it comes to things missing. I actually didn't see any spelling errors I don't think, so great job on that end as well. :D
Something I wanted to ask about, like, with this sentence:
He ripped the blanket off of me and grabbed my sides, I flailed around trying to escape the tickling.
Does she laugh, or just kind of awkwardly squirm? lol, just wondering what to picture here. I'm not sure if laughing counts as talking or not, or like, what you're considering specifically for the story.
Awesome job overall. Very intense, but I'm glad we got the backstory on why she's silent now. I wonder if her speaking out (albeit screaming) is really a breakthrough, or if it was just an in the moment thing. Hmm... it was sweet how Alex was there for her, though. :)
Can't wait to read more! :D

Okay :) I'll start with just the summary page, because there were kind of really noticeable things that should definitely be a focus to fix, to help readers want to read your story. Usually a lot of spelling stuff will turn people away if it's too bad.
Sam doesnt speak, she can but she doesn't. When her feelings for Alex start to develop grow stronger, her agitation with herself does too. Thearpy is supposed to be helping her but it's only making it worse, will another tradgey break her silence?
The first *doesn't
*Therapy
*Tragedy

@Nanook
You definitely can point things out, I tend to type too fast and not reread.

Ooooh... I'm liking this concept. :D I'm interested in learning about what happened to her and what made her go silent... I have a few thoughts but I'll keep them to myself for now. I like that she's Jack's sister... I often find that concept very cute, because like it just proves more of her closeness to the band, and that there will always be that connection to the band due to family. :)
I like how she does sign language for communication; I've read other fics where characters are or go mute, but usually they write or text things out, they don't use sign. So that's making this story a bit different already. :) Also, it's nice because it could come in handy for her if she meets someone who's deaf.
It's sweet how Alex learned sign language for her. :') That definitely shows something about him caring. <3
I find it interesting that they pick on her, though, even though it happened due to something traumatic. :/ Like that kind of has me wondering on the empathy. But I guess it's a way to try to make light of the situation.
But yeah, this is a really cool idea and I'm excited to see where you take it! So happy you're writing another Alex fic! :D
Also, something I wanted to mention... would you like me to point out corrections? I just noticed a few spelling things and it's something I've been meaning to ask you, since I noticed it happened sometimes with your other story I read too. I know some fan fic writers find it annoying, though, so I wanted to ask first, to see if you were interested. I do it mainly to help people help better their writing, but I know it can seem nit-picky. But just let me know if you're interested, I'll refrain if you're not. :)