It's the Eyes
Why do you do this?
"why do you do this?" My Mom made me jump. She came and sat down on the bed " Why do you have a boy everywhere you go?"
I looked up at her and I could feel tears in my eyes "Because there was one, who cared but rarely showed in it public. I only ever felt safe in his arms, only felt at home with him. It was like walking into the club house with him every day. I could easily say I love him. I do love him and being with him was like being on my own because we could act as natural as we had known each for a lifetime. Nothing ever felt rushed or forced But I was sick of being fucked around in the past so I had my reservations and he had his. In the end we were both too broken for the other to fix and stay strong at the same time. Being with him was the best years of my life and my only regret is I waited so long to see. I was scared to have my feelings. I was just scared so it took like 5 months for me to see him for the first time and to date its the biggest regret. Maybe if we had met sooner it would have worked out" The tears were just falling down my face but I was still smiling because this wasn't the first time he had me cry and probably won't be the last.
Hmm... this story was a bit more confusing. Perhaps it wouldn't have been as much if I watched SOA? Perhaps that's why I got a little lost with it...
But then you had Crowley and hell and demons (like Crowley from Supernatural?)... so were you combining aspects from different shows?
I think the main issue was, there was a lot going on without much backstory to it all. It kind of just went from one event to the next without any explanation. No backstory is okay initially, but not when looking at so many aspects that aren't being explained. There needs to be an explanation somewhere or other.
But, this all being said... I'll be subscribed in case you decide to rewrite, or maybe finish this to help make sense of all of it? This story has a sharp contrast in writing, though, compared to your others that I've read so far, which kind of confuses me... but maybe you just wrote this one at another time? I'm not sure.
I admire you for trying to combine all of these different aspects into one story, though. Again, I'll be around if you ever choose to continue it or rewrite. :)
2/6/18