I Did Something Bad - Comments

Finally getting to this! XD :)
Yay, I'm glad my suggestions helped. :) I do like the Instagram type format better, it gets a bit confusing in this latest chapter especially with all the dots in the texting format you repeated, lol. Like I backtracked and thought they just meant pauses at first, as opposed to trying to align the texts in the correct places lol. Plus, it kind of gets repetitive with the texting format.
Now, as for the latest chapter...
Don't have as much to say about this one, since it's basically just a recount of the same time frame from Violet's POV, but, I'm glad we got it. I mean, how else would we have found out it was her that texted Jack? I wonder if Zack will ever realize or inform Jack that it wasn't him messaging.
I definitely think she needs to stay away for a bit, so maybe this trip to New York will help her, just until things blow over. I don't really see it being completely avoided forever, though. But who knows? She no longer has her phone, so... how will they be able to contact her? Unless they know her "sister" (it's her actual sister, right? It confused me a bit when she was explaining... because it could just be a friend that is so close she's basically a sister?). Ooohhhh and here comes a bias suggestion that just occurred to me, WAIT FOR IT XD :
Alex knows her sister, or recalls her and thinks to contact her, but Jack doesn't. XD Because Alex is just that attentive to Violet. :D And he finds her in New York. ;)
LMAO. The bias is so bad, I know. XD
Hmm... but anyway, Zack is such a sweet potato. :) I'm glad he let her stay even after she told him the truth. He could have easily kicked her out, but, it just shows how noble of a character he is. :')
Think that's all I have to report on, Captain. Until the next update! XD :)

I have very conflicting feelings towards her leaving for New York. On one hand, yes, girl, run away! Get the heck away from Whacko Jacko. On another hand, I sort of feel bad because it’s her actions with Alex that turned Jack into a nut - not that it justifies his behavior at alll! And then on another hand (I have three hands today!) What happens with her and Alex? Obviously he’s gotta have at least a little crush on her or why would he have kissed her in the first place? And that becomes super complicated because he’s married. And what? They start dating and Jack is just supposed to be okay with it? That can’t end well for the state of the band. Ugh, maybe she should just go to New York!

Noooo she can’t go live in New York. I’m so torn. I want her to be with jack, but then I don’t bc he went all Hulk. Then think maybe she should be with Alex, but that a whole other bag of shitty consequences (his marriage, the band). Can’t wait to see what happens next!

@Nanook
Yay, I'm glad you found the plot twist interesting, hopefully I can manage to make a lot of those in the next chapters :) I love that you write what you were feeling as you read, and it makes me so happy to see that you're liking this! Thanks for the texting suggestions, I switched up to one of those :) I'm glad you're obsessed with this, haha, I really appreciate it <3 Oh yeah, that's why it took me a little longer to get this chapter done, because I was working on some school stuff *yawn* but the new chapter is finally here, so I hope you enjoy this one as well :)

OMG, speaking of plot twists...
She went to Zack. What. :O I was not expecting that at all. XD If anything, if it wasn't Alex (hehehe ;)), I was thinking her maybe going off on her own, not turning to another member of the band. So this is interesting. It's also interesting that Zack seems somewhat calm about it. But then again, in real life, he seems like a chill dude, so, perhaps you're keeping that aspect real for the story as well. :)
Ugh, she left her phone. :( lol, this shouldn't be that big of a deal, but as soon as it got to that part, it was like an itch I couldn't scratch. Especially considering Jack said NOTHING so now Alex probably thinks she hung up on him! :(
.................. do I need to say it? XD
But not only that, to try to be objective again, XD, now Jack can't contact her directly either. :/ Welp. And I just realized, I meant objective in my first comment, not subjective. XD I will blame
my tiredness at that point; I think you still understood what I meant though. XD
Ugh, this story is so good! I only get worked up over the best stories. XD Ones that influence my emotions so much, my comments are literally what my reaction is in real life, or what I would actually say, filler words and all. XD
Anyway, okay, so, going over the new update overall, I found it interesting that you switched to Jack's POV. I mean, you kind of hinted towards that, but I wasn't sure if it maybe would just still be in Violet's perspective and like there would be another confrontation or something. But this worked out better, because we were able to see his true thoughts.
And guess what? I'm still not feeling sorry for him! XD Girl. He passed that line when he got so violent. But I'm glad he's realizing his errors, though; that at least shows some growth/humanity to his character.
Hmmm... I'm looking forward to the next chapter now! :D Where Violet realizes she left her phone! LMAO. I'm thinking she probably at least realized that when she went to Zack, but who knows. XD
I'm very impressed that the irony was intentional; I wasn't sure if it was or not, but that shows how skilled of a writer you are, that you had it planned. :)
Okay, hmm... I believe that's all my thoughts. I could totally see flashbacks working in this story. :) Glad you don't mind long comments. XD
Oh! A suggestion on the texting format: in other stories, I've seen it often done like this:
From Zack:
(text)
From Me (considering they're first person POV):
(text)
I mean, this is a bit more tedious, I guess? But it's just what I've seen a lot and it makes things a bit clearer.
Orrr.... you could just label with their names in the iMessage type format:
Message Date
Zack: asadslkldasa
Me: asjdjasjalskdls
Zack: asjdlkasdsa
lol, does this make sense? I respect the fact that you were trying to do it in the true format though. This might help clarify better though, in case the formatting issue happens again. Although it was clear to me in the update, but just a suggestion if you want to try something else or in case someone else has an issue following along.
Okay, now I think that's the end of my thoughts. lol.
..... whispers.... *Team Alex*....
Okay I'm going I'm going. XD Excited to see what's next in store! Once again, seriously obsessed with this story and very impressed with your dedication. Keep it up! (But make sure you focus on school work when needed lol).

@aweirdkindofyellow
I know... :(

@Nanook
The bias, lmao. But we'll have to see in chapter 7. I wrote the new chapter almost right after uploading the last one, so this will be a quick update as well. I'm glad you saw the irony of it, like I didn't want this story to be a pity party for Jack, you know? I wanted kinda like a plot twist, idk. Hmmm we'll have to see if your prediction is right, haha. Yeah, I'm still not sure about the prequel, I was also thinking about writing some of the chapters as flashbacks, but I'll figure it out someday. I really appreciate the long ass comments though, and they definitely help :)

@Newyork_xo
Haha, I know, Jack's acting like a psycho. Hmm, we'll see about that... thanks for reading :)

@aweirdkindofyellow
Girllll, I miss you too. I just realized I haven't commented on your other story yet; I have a list going so that's why. :( Plus, just haven't had much extra time either. lol, it's easier when I finally get into stories update by update.
But yeah, I noticed it's been a while since I've read about Alex and Mickey, lol. But I totally understand, and yeah, it's definitely easier to read and leave feedback than writing on your own, I think, which is why I try to leave feedback on all stories to let the writers know how much I appreciate their work. XD :)

She shouldn't end up with either they both suck. Jack's abusive and Alex is an asshole for starting it all in the first place.


Completely unrelated, @Nanook I miss you. I haven't written in ages. I blame my finals. I just have one week left, but the past couple of weeks I've been demotivated to do anything. So, I'm taking inspiration from you and commenting on people's stories instead.

Yay, an update! I'm glad my feedback helped inspire; I'm loving that others are commenting too, this story deserves it. :)
The new update. Well... Jesus.... XD
Like OMG it just got worse. :OOO
But to reflect, I totally respect the way you want to write your story; I didn't mean the violent tendency is something you shouldn't write, you know? It's your story, so you definitely call the shots. But it definitely surprised me, is all.
I do not blame Violet for leaving. I'm glad she did, like if she stuck around for that... :O
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmm.... maybe Alex can give her a place to stay? ;) Hmmmmmmm. XD LMAO, the bias, I'm sorry. XDD
Anyway, so, Jack is just, gone. Will he regret what he did? *Thinking face emoji* Is this what he truly wants, to end things with Violet? But c'mon, like I said before... after seeing this side of him, would she really go back? :/
Interested in seeing where she ends up going. lol, if my prediction isn't right. XD But really, it's not easy just moving out of a place you've been in for a while and finding somewhere new right away.
So, yeah, this chapter: poor Alex. :( Poor Violet. It's ironic, isn't it, feeling bad for them? Maybe that was the point. Like I'm not feeling bad for Jack at all.
Oooh, and I may be interested in reading a prequel if it ever comes to that. :D You could do that, or explain it more in this installment. I could see that being discussed or looked back on in this one. It's interesting if there is more past to them though, considering Violet acted totally oblivious to Alex's feelings before the kiss at the beginning of this. Maybe she just wasn't aware of what was going on with him?
Anyway, great job with the update! :D I'm happy that you updated so quickly! :D Excited to see more. :)
Also, @hopeless1313 (hopefully you see this comment too), I feel like you keep agreeing with different bits of feedback I'm leaving, haha. You my new bestie. :D
lol, going back to feedback, I just want to mention I tend to leave long ass comments 90% of the time because I just don't know when to stop rambling. XD And, depending on what happens with each update, I may have more to say/report on. XD So, enjoy! XD Hopefully the feedback helps though. :D

I finally had a chance to read this story. Dang. I was ready to throw my full support behind Jack since Violet and Alex were very, very wrong. But now Jack’s a psycho and I can’t support that, lol. I look forward to reading more; maybe you’ll change my mind.

@aweirdkindofyellow
Hi! Yeah, I know it's hard to picture Jack like this. And I agree.

@hopeless1313
I know, right? I'm about to post the next chapter, thanks for reading :)

@Nanook
hello! thank you for you comment, I really appreciate it! haha, you have definitely inspired me to update soon, I’m about to post the next chapter right now. I’m actually thinking about writing a prequel because I want to clarify a lot of particular things you’ll be reading on this story, including Alex’s feelings! Yay, feedback is always appreciated :) thank you so much <3

Abusive Jack? I really can't imagine this. Maybe it's best if she runs far far away from him.

I 100% agree with Nanook, I would be freaked out now because of how intense Jack's reaction was. He needs to calm the fuck down. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Hmm... so I stumbled across this story a while ago, and was waiting to give feedback until there was a little more to it, but, I can't hold off anymore. lol. And it's only the fourth chapter in (usually I just wait a bit longer unless I've read from a writer before, to get a feel for their writing).
I really love what you have of this so far. Your chapters are pretty fair in length, and I think you write terrifically. :)
I'm really interested in this concept and seeing where you go with it. Like, the fact that all of this drama starts right from the get-go makes this story different, since I feel like drama like that will happen maybe halfway through a typical story, or at least a few more chapters in. I liked how this was different, though, and it again has me wondering where you plan on going with it, since you started with the drama.
I'm usually team Alex on stories, lol, spoiler. :P Sooo... in the latest update, I thought it was cute how he was quick to come over to defend her. :') I mean, he was a bit of a douche for not wanting to tell Jack about himself being involved, but by the way he's acting... I feel like he has some true feelings deep down for Violet, ooh la la. XD And like, the fact that he kissed her in the first place? Like there has to be some feelings he has hidden that he's starting to let take over.
But it's really cute and I'm totally not biased at all. XD
But, okay, from a subjective standpoint, Jack is a bit of a psychopath. XD Like, my God. I understand getting angry, but the way he's throwing multiple things (I could maybe excuse one thing, like, as an initial reaction), but just, the fact that he reacted that way is very concerning. :O Like, even if they do work things out, if I were Violet, I would worry about any future violent tendencies. Again, I can understand the anger, being angry at her... his actions really surprised me, though. I'm glad Alex was there to step in before something worse happened. Although now that the truth is fully out... :O Who knows what's gonna happen next.
Anyway, I wanted to comment because this story already has me captivated, and I'm hoping another comment will inspire you to update again soon. XD :) Because I really want to know what happens next.
I'll be here to leave feedback when I can. Once again, I think you're doing an excellent job so far and I'm excited to see what all you have planned for this. :D

@aweirdkindofyellow
Yes, I'm writing in present tense, or I'm trying, haha. I understand, I'm not fully bilingual, and if you'd hear me speak you'd take note of my accent right away. Oh yeah, I would really appreciate it if you could tell me whenever something sounds weird! I struggle with that sometimes, haha.

@idkhbtfm
Awesome, I'll happily do that for you then :) I can tell you're not new to writing, unless you somehow managed to write so well your first time. I'm pretty sure you're better than I was when I started my first story on here (third in total). But I can understand how a person and tense switch can be confusing. One question, you're writing in present tense? I thought it was past, that just the thoughts were accidentally in present. I also understand how difficult it can be with English not being your first language. It is mine based on my skills (not on the language I speak at home), but I grew up fully bilingual so sometimes I tend to use weird word combinations. If you want, I can tell you when something like that sounds a little off as well.