Dark affairs - Comments, page 4

@Nanook
What about ' I'm glad I'll probably never gonna stay here again' would that be more correct?
Anyway! Hope you like the next one, a bit more Cass but also bonding time!

Aww... haha, I love Cass in this story. ;) She is persistent. Wonder what her thoughts would be if she knew the whole truth? Hmmm...
Great job with the chapter though. It was cute how they were all together at the end. :) Feeling bad for Alex now. :(
Can't wait to see what's next in store!
Oh, and one thing I'll note:
I'm glad I probably never gonna stay here again.
I think you would want to say "I'm" instead of "I" the second time. Or rephrase this sentence. It just flowed a bit awkwardly, and didn't make much sense grammatically. Just something to look at.
Other than that, you did a great job wording wise. Can't wait for more! :)

@ALoveLikeNever_13
Every reader that comments makes me so happy, because actually I'm doing this all for you!
so glad you like it!

I love this so much!

Oh, no, sorry for the worry! I'll be here, just might be a bit delayed with commenting lol.
Thanks! :)

@Nanook
All good! Phew, I thought I had lost you as a reader!
I like Cass too, she brings a bit of spice in the mix!
Good luck with college!

Great job with the two updates! Sorry for the delay in commenting; I had read the other one not too long after you posted it, but somehow forgot to comment. Or I thought I did but I didn't? lol. Idk, been a bit tired the last few days. :/
But I enjoyed both chapters. Wow, Alex's breakdown... that was intense. Looks like Mickey and Jack may not be getting out of this as easily as they want to... but I like that Alex is still a part of it for now. :D He's been a douche but he's still my fav ATL member to read about. Sigh.
And yay, you brought Cassadee into the story! :D She's a nosy bee in this one, lol. But it's definitely entertaining. And I love how she stands up for Mickey, yay! :D Unlike Rian's rudeness. :P
But yeah, really enjoyed both updates and interested in seeing where it goes from here. Sorry if I get a bit spacey with comments... coming up on the last month of my last semester of college, so it's gonna get a bit hectic unfortunately. :/

@Newyork_xo
True! I like feisty Cass.

I like the addition of Cassadee. She's slicing things up even more than they already are.

Yeahhh, like getting out of this relationship with Alex was going to be easy for them... Sure....

@Newyork_xo
Hehe, turns out Dave isn't a creep but a really nice guy! Gotcha!

I did not like how she got in the truck with that random guy. I was convinced something terrible was going to happen. Thankfully, I was wrong.

I'm glad Mickey and Jack were able to talk through their issues. The fact that they didn't know each other too well before throwing themselves into such a crazy predicament is a good point. If they're going to last, they definitely need to take the time for themselves. I'm glad they realized that.

But that ending... damn! What happened to Alex??

@Nanook
Yay, I earned a golden star! ;)

Aww... their talk was very therapeutic. Feel like a lot was accomplished/clarified. Kudos. :)
I can see their issue now a little more clearly. I definitely agree with the fact that they should know more about one another, c'mon... like this goes back to the friends thing with Mickey, and Jack not realizing she had a life lol.
But oh no, Alex... what's going on? :( The way Jack left... Alex is probably just feeling sad and left out I'm thinking. But how will Alex feel when they tell him they're calling it off? :O
This cliffhanger, ugh, want to know what happens next! Can't wait for the next one!
Oh, and note this... I don't have anything to point out! :D Yay! :D Great job with the chapter! :)

Haha, ironic that you chose a Jon Bellion song. You should've did All Time Low! XD
Just kidding, the hint with the artist was enough, haha.
Great job with the update! Aw, poor Mickey. :( I wonder what's gonna happen now when they talk. :O Does Alex really not care about her, or is she just still letting her anger get in the way? :/
Two things I want to note:
But don't worry, Mickey, I'm sure some day you'll gonna find someone too."
So at the end of this sentence, you would either want to say "you're gonna find..." or "you'll find someone..." instead of "you'll gonna." Because saying "you'll gonna" is like saying "you will gonna" and that doesn't make too much sense, lol.
I go down to the hotel bar to get a drink and maybe a nice conversation but it is petty empty
Just wanted to note the first part of this sentence since it's long, lol. I think you want to say "and maybe have a nice conversation" as well as "pretty empty." I think the second one was a typo, unless "petty empty" is a term I've never heard of? lol.
But other than those two things, the chapter went smoothly. :) Glad that Dave guy was able to give her some advice, and wasn't a creep. lol.
Oh, and also, random question... do truck stops sell beer? XD I didn't think they did so I found it a little odd how they ordered it. Usually it's just a casual restaurant, kind of like a Waffle House, and they don't sell alcohol at those. XD But yeah, just getting a bit technical. Maybe they do at some and I just haven't heard about them lol.
Can't wait to see what happens next! :O

Ughhhh. Alex is a jerk. I was kind of hoping Rian was just being a bitch because he assumed things that happened, not that alex straight up lied. Mickey better stick to her guns and not let him manipulate her again. I can't wait to see what happens when Jack finds out.

@Nanook
Yeah doesn't really look like the whole polyamory thing is working out. I'm also team Mickey in this. Poor girl!

@Carebear
Hehe thank you, if you make enough popcorn, I come over and we watch the next episode together. ;)

lol, girllll.... this update.
YES. XD Damn Mickey was assertive and I loved her in this.
And excuse me to Alex. WTF. What an ass. He's the one that's probably the most to blame in their affair and he pins it on her? PSH. Like are you kidding me?! I do not blame her for being pissed off.
But now it sounds like she's officially ended things. Not sure how Alex or even Jack can salvage it. Maybe Jack... but Alex is just in too deep of a hole I'd say. :O
Love when Mickey says her piece. Like you go girl.
Hmm... but yeah, I also can't believe they ditched her, when she's tried her best to include both of them. :(
But great job with the update! Can't wait for more! Oh, and I'm glad we finally got more of why Rian dislikes her now, it makes sense but he just has the wrong story. Poor Mickey. :( Oh, and glad to see Zack getting more involved now, what a sweetie bear for siding with Mickey. :D

This is so much fun. I feel like I should make popcorn before reading it. You are really doing the thing with this one. I am trying to picture evil Ri and I am coming up with nothing. LOL! Anywho. This is a fun story. :o)