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I Don't Love You

Prologue

Today was the day of Y/N's boyfriend, Alex, and her's aniversery. They have been together for two years, and have been holding strong. Y/N decided to go over to her boyfriends house because she thinks he might be sick. He hasn't been answering her texts or calls, even though she had only called him twice, and texted him atleast four times tops.

Y/N drove over to Alex's house, worrying about him imensly. Is he okay? Is he hurt? All of these thoughts ran through her head as she put her beautiful white Volkswagen EOS White Knight. Y/N let out a huge breath, making her way towards the door to his house. Y/N softly rapped her knuckles against the wood, waiting for Alex to come to the door.

When no one came, she grabbed the extra key that his mum gave to her about a year and a half ago. Y/N unlocked the door, walking inside as if the house were her own. She shut the door behind herself and walked further into the house.

"Alex?" Y/N called out to him. She heard no reply. That's odd. Y/N walked up the flight of stairs leading to his room. Maybe he just didn't hear her. Y/N walked to his room which was the third to the right. She opened the door softly, not expecting what was on the other side.

"Alex, are you ok-" Y/N stopped in my tracks. In Alex's bed was him over top of some random blonde girl, who was moaning filthy words in Alex's ear. "Alex?" Her voice cracked. He quickly jumped off of the girl who looked at me confused.

"Y/N!" The girl ran to grab her clothes and ran to the bathroom in Alex's room. They both had a stare off to see who would break the silence.

"Why are you doing this to me?" Y/N whimpered in a soft voice. "After all we have been through. What have I ever done to you?" Alex paused at her words, taking them in before replying. "I don't love you like I did yesterday."

Y/N stared at him, looking to see if she could find any trace of lying in his eyes. Nothing. A tear fell down Y/N's cheek.

"Well, then I guess we don't belong together anymore." Y/N said in a whisper. She walked closer to him, putting a light kiss on his cheek, taking him by surprise.

"Goodbye, Alexander."

Notes

My first chapter! I hope you like it!

Comments

Josh is managing Sleeping w/ Sirens, because why not? But hey? All great things happen at random moments, so... <3

ALoveLikeNever_13 ALoveLikeNever_13
4/8/17

Oooh, okay, I see what you meant writing wise now. It flows a bit better in first person I think.
My question is, who is Josh managing? lol, because if Sum 41 or Blink 182 could be a possibility as an opener, the band must be pretty big. Just keep that in mind as you're writing. Not sure if you ever planned on mentioning who or not.
But great job with the chapter otherwise. Can't wait to see what happens next. Already reunited with Alex. :O

Nanook Nanook
4/8/17

Oh, gotcha. That makes sense.
I may have read your other story... I'm spacing on the title at the moment. lol, sorry, I've been reading a lot of stories lately so without the title reference, I'm a little spacey when it comes to remembering. Was it something with "Bite" in the title? Either way, it's okay, I understand. Sometimes you have to do that with stories, it happens. Admire you for realizing that as a writer and going with something you're more passionate for. :)
And understandable! Take your time really. :)

Nanook Nanook
4/3/17

@Nanook
I only wrote the Prologue in third to add to the fact that what happened in that chapter is in the past. Other wise, I will most likely be writing this in first person. I feel like mixing things up a bit. I'm glad that you have decided to read my story! If you were one of my readers of my other fanfic, I'm sorry for taking it down! I wanted to write a story with a better plotline, with actual protagonists and antagonists. And I also wanted to have something more interesting than the typical vampire has mate, etc; I'm glad you are sticking around to read. I will be truthful, and say that I will most likely be having slow updates seeing as I am in school, but I will try my very damned best at keeping up the updates. Thank you though!



ALoveLikeNever_13 ALoveLikeNever_13
4/3/17

Hi there!
So I saw this story on the homepage and decided to check it out since you're just starting it, to give you some feedback to continue.
I typically don't really read stories that have Y/N, mainly because it's more concrete with an actual name, but I'll give this one a chance because I'm interested in the plot line you have set up. The only thing slightly confusing about using Y/N, is that you're doing it in third person, when typically I see it in second, using "you" instead of "she." That might also get confusing since you're doing it that way and not just picking a name of your own.
Just some advice, it's up to you how you choose to write it, but just leaving my honest feedback. I will stick around to read, though, still. I encourage you to continue. :)

Nanook Nanook
4/3/17
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