It's the Eyes
Too Quick
"WHAT THE FUCK CLARY YOU NEARLY KILLED LAYLA?! ARE YOU INSANE" Clay shouted at me.
"Just a little" I said with a smirk
"OUT OF FUCKING PRACTICE"
"STOP FUCKING YELLING AT ME" I stood up from the table at which I was sitting at. Slammed my hands down and stared at the asshole straight through those blue dead eyes. "did anyone ever tell you you look like a monkey"
He raised a fist my mom and Jax came bursting through the door, I smirked again "You gonna hit me old man? Can you even do that with those knuckles?"
"Clary get out" I looked over at my mom "NOW GODDAMN IT"
I started to move out the room stopped at clays side and whispered "Oh and If I find out you ever hit my mom or my brother again I will slice your Goddamn throat and fill a bath with your blood. We clear?" I walked out Jax fist bumped me. I smirked and left.
I was walking through the club house Chibs and Tiggs were waiting for me. To drive me home safe. Chibs hugged me "You my dear are a mini Jackie Boy indeed. I love you firl"
"I love you to Scotty. Now home I need my OP"
"About that he's with layla."
"Righty, moms place then. How does Jax deal with it?" I asked them while having a smoke outside.
"He gets how hard it is and he knows its not for long"
They drove behind me to my moms, I was fast asleep when someone walked into my climbed into bed then pulled me in close. I woke up and turned around. Opie looked beat. "Baby are you alright?"
"I'm going to end things with Layla, from here on out I'm all yours baby" Opie nuzzled into my neck, My hand stroking his face. I looked up, with shock and scared expression all over my face. This is not what I had planned on him saying. I was now having to cut off all ties.
Hmm... this story was a bit more confusing. Perhaps it wouldn't have been as much if I watched SOA? Perhaps that's why I got a little lost with it...
But then you had Crowley and hell and demons (like Crowley from Supernatural?)... so were you combining aspects from different shows?
I think the main issue was, there was a lot going on without much backstory to it all. It kind of just went from one event to the next without any explanation. No backstory is okay initially, but not when looking at so many aspects that aren't being explained. There needs to be an explanation somewhere or other.
But, this all being said... I'll be subscribed in case you decide to rewrite, or maybe finish this to help make sense of all of it? This story has a sharp contrast in writing, though, compared to your others that I've read so far, which kind of confuses me... but maybe you just wrote this one at another time? I'm not sure.
I admire you for trying to combine all of these different aspects into one story, though. Again, I'll be around if you ever choose to continue it or rewrite. :)
2/6/18