Terrible Things
My name is not Care Bear.
I couldn't help but smile when I saw her sitting at her desk when I walked into the music room at lunch. She was huddled over her notebook, humming to herself. I watched her jump clear out of her skin when I cleared my throat.
"How long have you been standing there?" Her voice shook as she slammed her notebook shut and pushed her fringe off her face.
"Just got here, what you writing, Care Bear?" She stared at me and I swear her crystal blue eyes went darker.
"Don't call me Care Bear." I laughed and shrugged it off. I like the nickname, and as long as she was my music partner she would be called Care Bear. She could deal with it. "I finished the lyrics." She ruffled her blue fringe and fidgeted nervously with her purple locks. I took her notebook from the desk and started to flick through it. Her hair was constantly changing.
"How many songs..."
"Don't look at those!" Carrie screamed and snatched the book back, hugging it to her chest. "Don't look at my lyrics." I was so confused. We were writing a song together and I wasn't allowed to see her lyrics? What was wrong with her. I raised my eye brow and tried to take the book back. Her grip tightened and I could see her knuckles turning white. "Just... please. They're important to me. Its like a diary. Here." She turned to the page our song was written on and started to fidget again.
She sits up high surrounded by the sun
One million branches and she loves every one
"Mom and dad, did you search for me?
I've been up here so long I'm going crazy!"
And as the sun went down we ended up on the ground
I heard the train shake the windows
You screamed over the sound
And as we own this night
I put your body to the test with mine
This love was out of control
3-2-1 where did it go?
Now don't be crazy
Yes now of course you can stay here.
Been in a touring band for going on ten years.
"Big deal," she said, "I guess you're official."
I only said it 'cause I know what it's like to feel
Burned out
It gets you down,
We've all been there sometimes
But tonight I'll make you feel beautiful once again
And as the sun went down we ended up on the ground
I heard the train shake the windows
You screamed over the sound (over the sound)
And as we own this night
I put your body to the test with mine
This love was out of control
3-2-1 where did it go?
If I were you, I'd put that away
See, you're just wasted
And thinking about the past again
Darling you'll be okay
And she said,
"If you were me, you'd do the same
'Cause I can't take anymore
I'll draw the shades and close the door
Everything's not alright and I would rather..."
And as the sun went down we ended up on the ground
I heard the train shake the windows
You screamed over the sound (over the sound)
And as we own this night
I put your body to the test with mine
This love was out of control
Tell me where did it go?
"Holy Shit, Carrie." I pushed my fringe back as I read the final lyric. Her hand shook as they reached out to take the book back. "Where did they come from? They're amazing." She grinned and flashed her teeth before placing the notebook carefully back in her bag. I watched in wonder as she shrugged and picked up her bag. She silently waved goodbye and left the room. What the fuck. That girl was weird, but hell did I love it.
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"Care! Hurry up! I want food!" Jaime was yelling through my bedroom door. Again.
"You know," I pushed passed him on the way out my door. "Sometimes it might work if you don't yell at me.You have a tendency to do that." He whacked me over the back of my head with his car keys and I cringed as the metal made contact, scraping my skull. "Ass." I muttered under my breath as I took the stairs. A hand grabbed my upper arm and Jaime spun me to face him.
"Say it again. I dare you." I shook my hand free and continued down a few steps. "Say it. Caroline." I turned slowly at my name and stared at my older brother. He was 25 for Christs sake. I think it was time to move out, Jesus. I smirked and leaned toward him,
"Ass. Hole." His eyes sparked with rage and he dove at me. I jumped backward just in time and watched as he tumbled down the stairway. His head snapped against the floorboards as he finished his trip. A scream escaped my lips as I watched my brothers eyelids flutter closed and his chest fall for the last time.
"How long have you been standing there?" Her voice shook as she slammed her notebook shut and pushed her fringe off her face.
"Just got here, what you writing, Care Bear?" She stared at me and I swear her crystal blue eyes went darker.
"Don't call me Care Bear." I laughed and shrugged it off. I like the nickname, and as long as she was my music partner she would be called Care Bear. She could deal with it. "I finished the lyrics." She ruffled her blue fringe and fidgeted nervously with her purple locks. I took her notebook from the desk and started to flick through it. Her hair was constantly changing.
"How many songs..."
"Don't look at those!" Carrie screamed and snatched the book back, hugging it to her chest. "Don't look at my lyrics." I was so confused. We were writing a song together and I wasn't allowed to see her lyrics? What was wrong with her. I raised my eye brow and tried to take the book back. Her grip tightened and I could see her knuckles turning white. "Just... please. They're important to me. Its like a diary. Here." She turned to the page our song was written on and started to fidget again.
She sits up high surrounded by the sun
One million branches and she loves every one
"Mom and dad, did you search for me?
I've been up here so long I'm going crazy!"
And as the sun went down we ended up on the ground
I heard the train shake the windows
You screamed over the sound
And as we own this night
I put your body to the test with mine
This love was out of control
3-2-1 where did it go?
Now don't be crazy
Yes now of course you can stay here.
Been in a touring band for going on ten years.
"Big deal," she said, "I guess you're official."
I only said it 'cause I know what it's like to feel
Burned out
It gets you down,
We've all been there sometimes
But tonight I'll make you feel beautiful once again
And as the sun went down we ended up on the ground
I heard the train shake the windows
You screamed over the sound (over the sound)
And as we own this night
I put your body to the test with mine
This love was out of control
3-2-1 where did it go?
If I were you, I'd put that away
See, you're just wasted
And thinking about the past again
Darling you'll be okay
And she said,
"If you were me, you'd do the same
'Cause I can't take anymore
I'll draw the shades and close the door
Everything's not alright and I would rather..."
And as the sun went down we ended up on the ground
I heard the train shake the windows
You screamed over the sound (over the sound)
And as we own this night
I put your body to the test with mine
This love was out of control
Tell me where did it go?
"Holy Shit, Carrie." I pushed my fringe back as I read the final lyric. Her hand shook as they reached out to take the book back. "Where did they come from? They're amazing." She grinned and flashed her teeth before placing the notebook carefully back in her bag. I watched in wonder as she shrugged and picked up her bag. She silently waved goodbye and left the room. What the fuck. That girl was weird, but hell did I love it.
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"Care! Hurry up! I want food!" Jaime was yelling through my bedroom door. Again.
"You know," I pushed passed him on the way out my door. "Sometimes it might work if you don't yell at me.You have a tendency to do that." He whacked me over the back of my head with his car keys and I cringed as the metal made contact, scraping my skull. "Ass." I muttered under my breath as I took the stairs. A hand grabbed my upper arm and Jaime spun me to face him.
"Say it again. I dare you." I shook my hand free and continued down a few steps. "Say it. Caroline." I turned slowly at my name and stared at my older brother. He was 25 for Christs sake. I think it was time to move out, Jesus. I smirked and leaned toward him,
"Ass. Hole." His eyes sparked with rage and he dove at me. I jumped backward just in time and watched as he tumbled down the stairway. His head snapped against the floorboards as he finished his trip. A scream escaped my lips as I watched my brothers eyelids flutter closed and his chest fall for the last time.
This story is so good! OMG. I just found it and started reading it yesterday, and haven't stopped. I just caught up with all of the updates you have of it and really love it.
It's a very dark fan fic. Specifically with the first half, honestly one of the darkest I've read actually... like with that curse of everything happening on Sundays? Man... and you just kind of kept it up too. It was just very dark, and sad, but... different. And I really like that about this.
The second half seems to be deviating from that a little bit, but I sensed that coming back with the babies thing. I mean, not that I want anything to happen, but I almost feel you had something bad happening planned with the pregnancy. Perhaps not, perhaps that was just to raise some of the tone as opposed to keeping it happy go lucky, who knows. But I found it interesting how you did that.
I'm glad that Alex and Carrie finally got together, with the first part of this I was just screaming GET TOGETHER until they finally did. lol. And I was happy. :)
I found it a bit odd how they just took in those fans though. On a realistic writing level, the oddity of this story was the curse thing. But adding the fans thing in too, it just... it didn't really fit. Especially considering legalities and all of that. I feel like it was a little too easy that they gained guardianship.
But overall, I have enjoyed Alex and Carrie's love story. I'm sad to see it was never finished, so I'm leaving this comment to let you know if you ever do choose to finish it, I will be here to read, for sure. I'd love to see how it all ends for these two. Even if it's just a final chapter wrap up or something; I understand what it's like losing inspiration.
But yeah, sorry if this comment sounded harsh at all, but just wanted to leave my honest thoughts. I think you're a truly great writer, though, and hope you have at least kept up with it in your free time. :)
7/12/16