Terrible Things
Silence.
I could hear the music from the stage speakers but was too lost in my thoughts to notice what song they were up to. The set was perfect, the crowd loved us, we had made a kick-ass first impression. But I was still bugged. Every inch of me wanted to stand up and wait for Remembering Sunday. I sat there for what seemed like forever, going through lists of what I had to do when we got back home, stuff I had to do for the band, like make demos and get us signed. I had to....
"I didn't think much of it then..."
Shit. It was happening. It was time. I needed to get as far from the stage as possible... as far.. no.
ALEX
“You guys are pervs.” I mumbled as he threw yet another bra at Jack to put on his mic stand. “This song is called Remembering Sunday.” I strummed the acoustic and checked the sound, even though I knew Danny will have made it perfect. Zack had arranged for a singer to replace Juliet but I hadn't bothered to ask who. I picked up the notes and jumped into the song, the crowd singing along. I smiled as they screamed the lyrics and got more and more excited to see who would be joining me on stage. It was silent for a while and I turned to stare at Zack, my eyes asking where the hell this chick was. The crowd started to whisper in the silence and I picked up the chords, resorting to singing by myself. The voice echoed over the speakers and I knew who it would be before I turned to look. The crowd cheered, they had seen her perform with Pierce The Veil before and after her new band opened for them earlier, everyone knew her. I had sat at the back of the massive crowd to watch Pierce The Veil because I had nothing better to do, and when she ran on stage my heart fluttered. I smiled and continued to strum as Carrie perched herself on the feedback amp beside me. I hadn't sung with her since our performance in Senior Year and hearing her voice sent shivers down my spine and made butterflies explode in my stomach. Her smile was intoxicating and her hair flowed around her face as the wind whistled across the stage. As we belted the final notes, staring into each others eyes I knew Zack had done it. I knew he had fixed what wrong he had caused to us and I pressed my lips to that of my soul mate and the crowd went wild. It had taken three more years, but I finally had her. I finally had my Caroline.
"I didn't think much of it then..."
Shit. It was happening. It was time. I needed to get as far from the stage as possible... as far.. no.
ALEX
“You guys are pervs.” I mumbled as he threw yet another bra at Jack to put on his mic stand. “This song is called Remembering Sunday.” I strummed the acoustic and checked the sound, even though I knew Danny will have made it perfect. Zack had arranged for a singer to replace Juliet but I hadn't bothered to ask who. I picked up the notes and jumped into the song, the crowd singing along. I smiled as they screamed the lyrics and got more and more excited to see who would be joining me on stage. It was silent for a while and I turned to stare at Zack, my eyes asking where the hell this chick was. The crowd started to whisper in the silence and I picked up the chords, resorting to singing by myself. The voice echoed over the speakers and I knew who it would be before I turned to look. The crowd cheered, they had seen her perform with Pierce The Veil before and after her new band opened for them earlier, everyone knew her. I had sat at the back of the massive crowd to watch Pierce The Veil because I had nothing better to do, and when she ran on stage my heart fluttered. I smiled and continued to strum as Carrie perched herself on the feedback amp beside me. I hadn't sung with her since our performance in Senior Year and hearing her voice sent shivers down my spine and made butterflies explode in my stomach. Her smile was intoxicating and her hair flowed around her face as the wind whistled across the stage. As we belted the final notes, staring into each others eyes I knew Zack had done it. I knew he had fixed what wrong he had caused to us and I pressed my lips to that of my soul mate and the crowd went wild. It had taken three more years, but I finally had her. I finally had my Caroline.
This story is so good! OMG. I just found it and started reading it yesterday, and haven't stopped. I just caught up with all of the updates you have of it and really love it.
It's a very dark fan fic. Specifically with the first half, honestly one of the darkest I've read actually... like with that curse of everything happening on Sundays? Man... and you just kind of kept it up too. It was just very dark, and sad, but... different. And I really like that about this.
The second half seems to be deviating from that a little bit, but I sensed that coming back with the babies thing. I mean, not that I want anything to happen, but I almost feel you had something bad happening planned with the pregnancy. Perhaps not, perhaps that was just to raise some of the tone as opposed to keeping it happy go lucky, who knows. But I found it interesting how you did that.
I'm glad that Alex and Carrie finally got together, with the first part of this I was just screaming GET TOGETHER until they finally did. lol. And I was happy. :)
I found it a bit odd how they just took in those fans though. On a realistic writing level, the oddity of this story was the curse thing. But adding the fans thing in too, it just... it didn't really fit. Especially considering legalities and all of that. I feel like it was a little too easy that they gained guardianship.
But overall, I have enjoyed Alex and Carrie's love story. I'm sad to see it was never finished, so I'm leaving this comment to let you know if you ever do choose to finish it, I will be here to read, for sure. I'd love to see how it all ends for these two. Even if it's just a final chapter wrap up or something; I understand what it's like losing inspiration.
But yeah, sorry if this comment sounded harsh at all, but just wanted to leave my honest thoughts. I think you're a truly great writer, though, and hope you have at least kept up with it in your free time. :)
7/12/16