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Terrible Things

Electricity.

I smiled at the two boys and winked. Jack pulled me down the stairs into a hug and declared his undying love for me and Alex just stood by, watching, with a content smile on his face. I giggled at Jacks reaction to seeing me again and explained to the boys why I was there. Rian called Alex's name and appeared behind him, mimicking the expression that had previously been on Alex's face.
“Hey, Rian. How are you?” I asked as his facial features slowly morphed from a look of total shock into his charming smile.
“I'm great Care Bear!” He spun me in a circle like Jack had. “What the hell are you doing here?”
“I came with Pierce the Veil. I've been friends with the Fuentes' since forever. They're who I moved in with when I went to Cali. I'm their “Guitar tech”” I made the quote marks with my fingers and both boys laughed, I swear I even heard a sound come out of Alex's mouth. “You gonna hug me Gaskarth? Or are you gonna stand there smiling like you took a really good hit of acid?” I remarked. Alex's face broke into a grin and he pulled me close. The moment we touched we both looked into each others eyes with a look of total amazement. It was just like the kiss senior year, a flow of electricity when our skin connected. Alex jumped away and a tear formed in his eye. I could tell he had had the same flashback as I had, but his hadn't come with such good memories.

ALEX POV

The moment we touched that old spark came flooding back under my skin. My head raced with memory of that day in 2004. My mind took over and Chloe came running into the classroom crying. More and more flashbacks hit me until the first one was uncovered.

I was walking home from Zack's and decided to bypass Chloe's place. She hadn't been in a great place the last few days and her aunt whom she hated had come from Nebraska to take care of her during her final semester. I knocked on the door and there was no answer. The car was gone, so her aunt must be at work. I reached under the mat and pulled how the spare key. How cliché. Pushing the door open I called out Chloe's name. There was no answer so I looked in the kitchen and lounge before heading up the stairs to her bedroom. No one. Where could she be? I leant on the window sill and sighed. I hated it when she went missing, I could never find her until she came back to me. I breathed in the stuffy air of her bedroom and turned to the push the window open. I gave the sticky hinges a good shove and nearly fell the storey to the ground. The top half of my body hanging out the window I saw her. Her body hung limp from the tree and a scream escaped my lips. I ran the stairs and straight out the back door.
No, no, no, no, no.” I mumbled as I cut loose her noose and lowered her to the ground. “Chloe?” I brushed her cheek and tried to nudge her awake. “CHLOE!” I yelled before shaking her. “Wake up Clo, wake up! Look at me!” I heard a gasp from over the fence and saw the neighbour staring at Chloe. Her usually bright chocolate, full hair hung limp and lifeless next to her pale cheeks. I pulled the rope form her neck to reveal the bright red line that marked her skin and see the tiny trickle of blood run form the corner of her mouth. “Babe!” The tears were running down my cheeks and I kept screaming as I rocked her lifeless body in my arms. She couldn't be dead. She had planned out wedding, numbered and named our children. Chloe was one of those girls who planned her entire life, and she planned on me being weaved into that. Now, now she could have none of it. For the first time in a long time, I prayed. I begged to have her back, if I could have her back, alive, cheeks full and hair beautiful, I would never leave her. I would give the exact life she dreamed of. I would do anything to make her happy. Just please, bring her back. The paramedics pried me off her and a police officer dragged me away kicking and screaming to take me back to my girlfriend. I wanted to hold her, I wanted her back.

I backed away from Carrie and ran back to the bus. I could hear Jack and Rian following after me, and as glad as I was to see her again, I wished Carrie would stay away for now. I climbed into my bunk and hid under the blankets. I hadn't done this since I was a child.
“Alex,” Jack called. “Dude, what's wrong?” His voice was right next to my bunk now and I remained silent.
“Dude,” Rian sat on the bunk opposite me and kicked me with his foot. “Come out and talk bro.”
I grunted in disagreement and the boys sighed.

“For fucks sake,” Jack mumbled. “Fine.” I listened for the bus door to close and removed myself from my bunk and walked straight into the shower. I stripped myself down and jumped into the water. I let the falling liquid hide my tears and ran my hands over my hair. Fuck, how could one girl bring back so much pain. I hadn't cried over Chloe in two years, sure I got upset when we performed Remembering Sunday but, wow. That Carrie did something to me and I had no idea how. I had known her all of three weeks before she moved to Cali, but somehow I missed her terribly. I never understood the way she made me feel but I ignored it, finally forgetting about her until she reappeared her at Warped.

Notes

Im so sorry I write such short chapters but I just find it easier to keep the story progressing this way :)

So what do you think about the story line?

Comments

This story is so good! OMG. I just found it and started reading it yesterday, and haven't stopped. I just caught up with all of the updates you have of it and really love it.
It's a very dark fan fic. Specifically with the first half, honestly one of the darkest I've read actually... like with that curse of everything happening on Sundays? Man... and you just kind of kept it up too. It was just very dark, and sad, but... different. And I really like that about this.
The second half seems to be deviating from that a little bit, but I sensed that coming back with the babies thing. I mean, not that I want anything to happen, but I almost feel you had something bad happening planned with the pregnancy. Perhaps not, perhaps that was just to raise some of the tone as opposed to keeping it happy go lucky, who knows. But I found it interesting how you did that.
I'm glad that Alex and Carrie finally got together, with the first part of this I was just screaming GET TOGETHER until they finally did. lol. And I was happy. :)
I found it a bit odd how they just took in those fans though. On a realistic writing level, the oddity of this story was the curse thing. But adding the fans thing in too, it just... it didn't really fit. Especially considering legalities and all of that. I feel like it was a little too easy that they gained guardianship.
But overall, I have enjoyed Alex and Carrie's love story. I'm sad to see it was never finished, so I'm leaving this comment to let you know if you ever do choose to finish it, I will be here to read, for sure. I'd love to see how it all ends for these two. Even if it's just a final chapter wrap up or something; I understand what it's like losing inspiration.
But yeah, sorry if this comment sounded harsh at all, but just wanted to leave my honest thoughts. I think you're a truly great writer, though, and hope you have at least kept up with it in your free time. :)

Nanook Nanook
7/12/16
The pleasure is mine :-)
Barrakitty_Sel Barrakitty_Sel
12/4/13
@Barrakitty_Sel

Haha thank you so much! x
Love it
Barrakitty_Sel Barrakitty_Sel
12/4/13
:-)
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11/30/13