I couldn't help but notice the excessive use of commas in your sentences? Not trying to sound rude, but a lot of the time they were kind of unnecessary and made it difficult for me to read.
But besides that, I'm really liking this story so far! Keep it up :)
I couldn't help but notice the excessive use of commas in your sentences? Not trying to sound rude, but a lot of the time they were kind of unnecessary and made it difficult for me to read.
But besides that, I'm really liking this story so far! Keep it up :)
2/28/16