The Boy Next Door - Comments

Great job with the chapter! It was cute! :D
I love Halloween. :D It's seriously my fav holiday as well, next to the Fourth of July. :)
lol, that joke was so random, but I found it funny as well.
Hmmm... not much else to say but I did enjoy the chapter. One thing to note:
You clearly have succeed in making me do the things I never thought I'd do in my high school years, Alex."
"succeed" should be "succeeded"
Since it's explaining a past action, although... that may have just been a typo and you may already know that, lol, not sure.
But yeah, other than that, chapter went by pretty smoothly. :) Can't wait for the next!

Oh gotcha, yeah, I'm confusing stories then, whoops. XD
:)

@Nanook ahaha Alex's not a player in this story, I mean he sleeps around and all but this one is his first real relationship. Also, thanks for the offer! I definitely need to be more careful and do a double check before posting it but once the story's finished I'll go through each chapter and edit it!

Oh, haha, I can understand that confusion then. XD Yeah, if you need a reference like that, just feel free to message me. I'd probably suck at configuring but I can at least tell you if it's a long or short distance, lol.
Great job with the new update! It was really cute. :) Love that they're together now and everyone is on board with it. :D
I'll just point out two things, they may be typos or lost in translation things, lol.
"To be honest, I'm not that surprise.
It should be "surprised", you just missed the ending there.
"You'll always be my Ginger Princess." Alex responses
Instead of "responses," it should be "responded." But side note, thought it was cute when he said that to her.
It was also cute when he wanted to get to know her better. Something that surprised me: this was Alex's first relationship? Wasn't he a player, though? Maybe I'm thinking of another story... or by relationship, maybe you mean like the first real one... just clarifying. Maybe I'm just getting that factor confused with another story. I tend to read a lot. XD
But overall, solid update and can't wait for more! Love that they're coming more frequently. :)

@Nanook I tried adjusting with the us metric so I tried to use feet instead of metres ahahha I thought it was a lot....

Also, thanks for the feedback! Glad you enjoyed it, and hoping you'll like the next one I just updated also ;)

Yay, another update! And OMG, really loved this chapter!
She finally talked to him! :D And they kissed for real! :D So happy that she's chosen to give him a chance.
What an idiot, though, Alex is. XD Like climbing her roof. C'mon now. There should've been an easier way to go about it.
Logically, I must note the length of the fall. "3 feet" isn't that much at all; it's maybe the size of a young kid. lol. Maybe like, 10 feet would make a bit more sense, especially considering the impact and that it hurt him.
And I know I'm not your favorite person in the word but you are mine.
"word" should be "world" haha, I'm thinking that was probably just a typo though.
I don't know what to respond, he basically just confessed his feelings for me and this is the first time anyone's done that.
This is another thing that probably gets confusing with translation. Instead of saying "know what to respond" you would want to say "know how to respond." I mean, saying "what" makes sense, but not so much grammatically. Just a thing to keep in mind.
Other than those things though, solid job with the chapter. Really enjoyed it since they finally got together. :D And I'm glad Jack approves, yes! :)
Can't wait for the next! :D
And glad that I was able to clarify that in the last comment, yeah, it just depends on how you use it I guess lol.

@Nanook finally! To be honest I've always had doubt about that ahaha, the usage of person and people in that context. Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed the update :)

Yay, great job with the update! Gail definitely needed that talk with Zack; I'm glad she's updated with what all is going on now. :) Should be interesting to see what happens now that she knows.
One thing I spotted:
He's been through a lot, he's one of the strongest person I know.
It should be "people" instead of "person". Or you could say "person" but in that case, you would need to reword to "he's the strongest person I know." So just switching the word or rewording the sentence a bit.
There were also a few places where punctuation was missed, but that can be dismissed since you did this via your phone, so it was probably difficult. Hope you're able to get your charger soon.
Wonder what Gail is going to do. :O Can't wait for more! :D

@Nanook next chapter's up! It doesn't give out much though.. but I promise an update on Saturday!!

OMG.
THEY KISSED. :DD
Plot twist: she actually lets him talk to her and doesn't block him out, lol. Now that would be interesting, to see where you take that. I know it probably won't work that way, though. It would be different though.
But awww... :D YAASSS, so happy it finally happened. Gail just needs to accept it though. I'm sure she felt those sparks. *heart eyes emoji*
Interested in seeing what happens next. What will happen if Jack finds out? :O (But personally, Jack just needs to get out of this relationship, lol). Let Alex and Gail be together. ;) But again, realize it doesn't work that easily.
Interested in seeing what happens next. :D
Oh, and one thing I spotted that was off:
"Gail, I'm sorry. I know I shouldn't have done that. I can explain!" Alex bangs on he door
Not only missing punctuation at the end of this part, but 'he' should be 'the' lol. Just a small issue, not a big deal.
But anyway, yeah, can't wait to see what happens with them next, with this big step finally happening. :)

Haha, OMG. Yeah, I would say an average person, maybe 3 in that amount of time? Unless they're looking to get wasted, lol. That's a different story and context entirely. With a chill situation like this, yeah, I wouldn't imagine it would be that much. If someone were to go partying, maybe a different story. XD
Oh, wow. You've definitely seen a lot more than I have then. Sigh. Dream would be to have a home in another country someday, but idk if that will happen. :/
And no problem! :)

@Nanook forgive my belgian self... I thought it was a normal amount lmao, I can go through 8 cans in one and a half hour #belgianpride we do drink a lot, our pride and joy, la biere :D
Of my 16 years of living, I've lived in 3 countries so I'm quite used to changes.. But yeah, it's always hard leaving the life I've built every time :(

Thanks for the review as usual! Loved it as always!

YAASSS, an update! :D
Great job with the new chapter! Hmm... wonder if Alex passed his test. XD And interesting how Gail took him up on the invite, not that I blame her given her other situation. :/
But this thing with her mom definitely explains more about her character.
Two things I noted:
"So, I hope I hadn't wasted my time tutoring you for nothing." I say as we walk outside the class
It should be "haven't" instead of "hadn't". Just a tense issue; that's actually pretty common with switching languages I've found, so you're not alone with that.
When the movie finally ends, I am 6 beers deep.
This isn't necessarily an error as much as I'm questioning the logic of it. She drank 6 beers in the timing of half a movie? It just seems like a lot for that short amount of time... plus, how big are the beers? lol. I assume at least a good bottle or glass... lol, idk, but just think about logic here. Like she would have literally needed to inhale them. Max, I would say 3 would make the most sense here.
But other than that, the chapter flowed pretty nicely and I didn't really spot anything else. :) Great job and can't wait to see what happens for the next one! I found it interesting that it at least wasn't awkward with Jack and Alex, lol.
And that's cool that you're moving! Or maybe not? You seem hesitant about it, lol, but I just find it cool because I've been stuck in the same place my whole life, so I would honestly love to move. XD But hope it goes well for you. :)

Aw, no problem, really no big deal. Take your time if you need to. :)
And aw, that sounds a bit rough. I've never smoked, mainly because my mom always has and I've just seen what it's done to her. I hate the addiction aspect of it. Plus I've had family members that will spend their last money on cigarettes because they're so addicted. It's insane. :/
But on a lighter note... great job with the new update! :) Not much happened, but I'm glad Alex and Gail had more conversation, and opened up a little more to each other... although I'm trying to think back... did Alex lie to her? Him and Jack fought... he didn't have an attack, did he? I'm a bit tired at the moment so I'm finding it hard to recall, lol. Also feeling a bit lazy to go back and find that.
But if he lied... that was something serious to lie about and that was kind of poor judgement I think. :/
But I still am shipping them and am glad that they're making some progress.
One thing I want to point out:
We're at Starbucks once again, Mrs. Lindsey was thrilled to know that I had been giving Alex tutor,
Looking at the part "giving Alex tutor" isn't really a complete thing to say. You should probably say something more along the lines of "that I had been tutoring Alex." Because the way it originally is, it almost insinuates that she gave Alex a tutor, or a person. lol. It might just be different verbiage used here though, I think I've seen it used similarly before, but to make it more accurate, I think it would be better to go along the lines of my suggestion.
But other than that, thought you did a great job with the chapter and I can't wait for more! :D

@Nanook thank you!! Sorry for the late update and all, I'll try my best to keep up. And also yeah I'm really glad I finally committed and stopped smoking. It's been really hard, my mouth feels sour at all times (I used to smoke 8 cigs per day) but I'm doing better now!

Yay, an update! Great job with the new chapter! :)
lol, Alex and his pestering. :P Tsk tsk. Sad that he has to do that to hide his true feelings. Just want them to get together. :(
But I found the Breakfast Club comparison interesting, I hadn't even thought about it, but Alex is sort of like the bad boy from the movie. And then he calls Gail "Princess" so that's definitely a comparison to Ringwald's character. So, interesting. :)
One thing to note:
At this point, I'm literally this close to just getting off the car and
Just wanted to highlight the first part of the sentence. Instead of saying "getting off the car" you should say "getting out of the car" because using "off" makes it sound like she's on top of it and not inside of the car, lol. If that makes sense.
But other than that, everything else flowed pretty smoothly. :) Can't wait for more! That's awesome that you've gotten a lot of it written down; I understand the hassle of transferring from print to type, I used to do that too but then I started to get lazy so I just type everything now, lol.
And kudos for quitting smoking! Proud of you girl, that's not an easy thing to do so that's awesome! :)

:D Oui, j'ai compris! (Although another thing I tend to mix up are the tenses, so apologies there if we continue to go back and forth with French a bit lol).
J'ai des cours de francais en lycée et a la université! :D Techniquement, le francais est ma matière secondaire (but please do not test me on that LMAO).
And yes, I am also better at reading/writing French as opposed to speaking it and I often struggle when listening as well, because fluent speakers obviously talk fast, so... XD
Et de rien. :D

@Nanook c'est bien que t'as compris que j'ai ecrit! le francais est mon premier langue donc je le parle mieux que l'anglais, even though I still make mistakes as I speak because come on let's be real here languages are hard af, we should get back to grunting. And as always, merci beaucoup for the feedback!

Aw, no problem. :) And I understand; I finally have a break from college and I'm loving it, lol.
Great job with the new update! Ooohh... so she's going to be tutoring him now. This should be interesting. And aww, Alex was so excited about it. :D I'm glad he was able to convince her instead of her just getting out of it. I'm just, still shipping them. :)
Just a few things I noted:
I'm just going to give him math tutorings, it's not like we're going out or what.
Ending with 'or what' was a bit awkward... maybe you meant 'whatever'? Or perhaps you could have said 'anything' instead of what? lol. Didn't really make sense to just put 'what'.
As I start jogging lightly, maybe I should really consider exercisesing more.
Two things here. Before 'maybe' you should add 'I think'. It just completes the sentence a bit more. Also, 'exercising' is spelled wrong lol.
I run to the car, I don't want my mom to see Alex because I know she would ask him to come with us she did
I think there should be an 'if' before 'she did'. lol. It's a bit incomplete without another word there.
But other than those things, thought it was a great update. Really enjoyed it because things are progressing again with Alex. Love how he's back to calling her Princess. lol.
Can't wait for the next!
And that's awesome you saw State Champs!! I love them. And got to sing on stage with them? :O OMG.
Et oui, moi aussi! Un petit peu. :) (Don't ask anything too challenging though, lol.)

@Nanook thanks for noting and the review, loved it as usual! I'm also sorry for the late update and everything, I've been so caught up with school work, but I'll try to update as often as I could to keep the story going!