No Pads… No Helmets… Just Memories! - Comments, page 2

I MISSED YOU SO MUCH YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND OMFG I'M SO HAPPY.
And I hope you're okay. <3

can you please update?

Seriously it's so difficult to read fanfiction featuring people younger than me sometimes. I'm not finished yet granted (on chapter 57) but the poor decision making of the characters is pissing me off to no end (particularly Jasey). What annoyed me about Alex was that he refused to tell her from the beginning (which would piss me off incredibly) because healthy relationships are built on trust and he just completely left her in the dark about what was going on. It was so freakin predictable that it was going to blow up in his face. He kept saying "I can't tell you this" and I'm going "why the fuck not, it's about her and you are treating her like shit without giving an explanation (asshole move on his part)". If his excuse was that he "wasn't allowed to" that's bullshit because he is already breaking the rules just by seeing her and it's not like they bugged her room. If he told her initially they could have devised a plan to thwart the blackmail together and avoid future arguments. (I would also like to note he was an idiot to believe that people as nasty as them would really follow through on their promise). What motivation did the "preps" or whatever have for stopping this blackmail. Given that they are terrible people they would likely milk this info for all it's worth and never stop if Alex is simply complacent being their minion without any apparent plan to stop them other than continuing to follow through with orders. I would be so pissed if someone tried to keep valuable information from me because they thought I was just the typical woman; a delicate flower that needs their man to protect them from all harm. Now moving on to Jasey, she has a tendency to be irrational and melodramatic (which at least keeps her out of Mary Sue are since she has flaws). I mean no offense but she seems to be a shit girlfriend. She is so insecure and self deprecating (it's quite sad) that her current excuse for not being with Alex romantically is that it would "damage his reputation". Like oh my god that is so fucking stupid, no one gives a shit about high school social status after graduating (trust me I graduated in 2013).
Additionally, damn this high school sucks. The high school I went to (and from what I heard from friends who went to other schools) people were actually for the most part genuinely nice for the most part and only a couple rotten eggs. People like Tammy would be hated by most and would not have any social relevancy other than with dudes looking for a wet hole... Our prom queen was the valedictorian and one of the nicest people I've ever met so it seemed where I went a good personality actually equalled popularity (go figure).
Now as far as the issue with her secret getting out. How in the hell would that cause the school to hate her? A much more likely scenario would be that most everyone would be SUPER nice because they felt sorry for her (with could be bothersome). Anyone who makes fun of someone because of a situation they can't control would be hated by all for being the worlds biggest asshole. Our homecoming king was a boy with autism that EVERYONE on campus adored because he was so sweet. Had ANYONE gave him a hard time you could be sure there would be a group of guys willing to beat them to a pulp.
Honestly WHAT THE FUCK is wrong with the people at the high school where they see a guy beating up a girl and don't seem to give a shit like ARE YOU FUCKING KIDDING ME.
(I WOULD BE SO IMPRESSED IF YOU ARE STILL READING THIS LONG ASS REVIEW BY NOW. HOW PEOPLE ARE ABLE TO POST A SINGLE SENTENCE REVIEW ABOUT A 96 CHAPTER STORY IS BEYOND ME)
Now Jasey's reaction to the news is actually what fueled my anger and this rant the most (and the reason for even bothering to comment). She was obviously justified in getting mad at Alex for not telling her about the deal with Colton and Tammy. But it frustrated me that she was going off thinking he wanted to get rid of her (this is an example of Jasey's logic being severely flawed). I could not even fathom how she reached this conclusion given that Alex begged her never to leave him when he was having a panic attack and then drove a long ass way to drag her back to town after she impulsively ran away (supposedly for the good of everyone else but again her logic is so fucked that she couldn't see that leaving would hurt them). I mean he freakin begged on the phone for her to come home. Her effed logic is again making it's presence known by how she somehow thought the fact that Alex went through all this trouble to keep her secret and keep her from leaving equalled him wanting to be rid of her... This is why I feel like she wouldn't make a good girlfriend because this argument ran the same way as a girl asking if she's fat and the boyfriend comes up with an "insufficient" answer and is constantly trying to tell her that she's beautiful but the girl just can't seem to accept that answer because she's too insecure.
"'Yeah Alex, you care so fucking much to just about shove me back on a plane, want to help me come pack?' I snipped hitching a thumb over my shoulder.
'Jasey you know that’s not what I meant please let me explain!'
'REALLY ALEX?' I snapped, 'CAUSE IT SURE AS WELL SOUNDED LIKE IT!'"
Like again she came about this conclusion despite ALL EVIDENCE pointing towards the contrary. Then she suddenly believes that Tammy being involved in this scandal is inconceivable despite making complete sense (Alex seemingly dating her despite showing no signs of attraction in addition to Tammy's hate for Jasey and the fact that she is closely associated with Riley). Have I mentioned the logical and rational part of Jasey's brain seems to be malfunctioning?
Final topic I want to express that pisses me off SO MUCH in fanfiction is when someone is not allowed to explain themselves. Jasey continues to cut Alex off even though an explanation is long overdue then breaks up with him in a fit of rage without even discussing the issue at hand. For this reason this relationship is doomed to fail unless they both GROW THE FUCK UP. When you have a problem in a relationship you TALK about it and try to reach an understanding before suddenly calling it quits. I mean her actions indicate that she doesn't actually love Alex otherwise she would try to actually make it work out between them instead of giving up when conflict ensues. They remind me of those couples that are infatuated with each other one week, then break up (with the idea that it's the "last time" and hate each other only to get back together again the next week).
PREDICTION: Alex will keep fucking up by having good intentions but being an idiot and not thinking about the consequences or communicating with Jasey. Jasey will find out in the most horrible way possible then lash out once more and break up with Alex "for the last time". Alex will be all sweet and win Jasey back after being allowed to properly explain himself (since Jasey likely won't let him do so before breaking up with him much like this situation) and they will be lovey dovey once more. This process will repeat until Alex stops fucking up and Jasey actually stops to consider things when faced with an obstacle in their relationship.
Ok LONG ASS REVIEW done. I just felt the need to vent (which is a good thing since it means I am emotionally invested in this story). The writing is decent btw (I have really high standards though I'm 19 going 20 and have been reading Harry Potter fanfiction for years so I am used to novel-quality work). Also props because for band fanfiction THIS IS LONG. I mean I'm used to reading FF that are 100,000 words but I rarely see that in celeb fanfics. How many words is this? (I'M REALLY CURIOUS). Also if you are sill reading this by now then holy shit cuddos to you because I doubt you will read this whole thing and reply but whatevs. On chapter 57 and will continue reading, hopefully Jasey and Alex have some character development in the future *crosses fingers because character development is what drives long fanfics*
Mkay well peace out *flies away on a broomstick*

Bro, take your time updating. I don't think ANYBODY in their right mind will abandon this story because you haven't posted in a couple of weeks. I love you. I love This story. but YOUR health is more important. You need to focus on you. I can wait. <3.

Why. Why are you doing this. My heart feels like it has been ripped in half and stomped on and then ripped into even more pieces. I am going to cry omg I can't do this. *Turns on music* "Well if you wanted honesty, that's all ya had to say.." cx

And I'm sorry, I hope everything gets better for you. Update whenever you feel, bc it's hard to keep up with so much at once when you have other problems going on. I'm here for you! <3

@SarahBethBarakat
StOP xD <3 ; - ;

@Rebecca.Troy
Sorry babe.. your emotions may just be getting royaly fucked over till the sum of this story.. which is nearly quicly may I add :)

@JacksWife678
if it makes you feel any better, i feel just as conflicted writing it as you probably do reading it, but i got so side tracked with this story, i made it way longer then i had intended too and felt like i just needed to fuck with y'all one last time before capping it and moving on to more developed stories with better story lines, ya feel? hahahah

I legit can't compliment your writing any more because I've done it so many times already..........but this chapter is amazing....but please...STOP FUCKING AROUND WITH MY EMOTIONS

Omg ur writing is so awesome and realistic & like just gosh, you're a great author. BUT OTHER THAN THAT I AM SOOOO MAD AT YOU RIGHT NOW DID YOU REALLY HAVE TO DO THIS BC MY HEART IS LITERALLY BROKEN AND I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO DO IM FREAKING OUT OVER THIS CHAPTER LIKE POOR JASEY BUT POOR ALEX AND WTF JASEY BUT THEN AGAIN ALEX MAYBE THAT NURSE WAS RIGHT..BUT STILL I CANT! NO! NO NO NO THIS IS ALL WRONG!! :'( *sits in a corner and cries*

THE DRAMA! THE SUSPENSE! I CAN'T TAKE IT OMG JASEY NOOOO :( CAN'T WAIT TILL NEXT WEEK

I fucking hate you, yet I fucking love your guts...xD you see my problem here? God I love this story with a burning passion and all I have is heart ache right now so it's not good. ; - ; <3

@Rebecca.Troy
hahahah sorry i didnt mean to make you cry!! kinda!!! wupps... (:

@Tell My Voice What It Takes
yeahhh... i know hahaha! :)

@JacksWife678
sorry.. one more week before you even get snippets of the real story of what happened.. call me evil! hehe

JASEY NOOOO OMG I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NO NO NO THEY NEED TO GET TO HER RIGHT NOW POOR JASEY OH NO OH NO IM FREAKING OUT HOLY SHIT!! and ouch hope you're alright <3

Woah. That was intense.

K....thanks for making me cry....I'm literally speechless....I don't know what to say right now... The part where she said she didn't want to see Marc right now got me. I hate this, yet I crave this story <3

@izzytheginger
Hahaha thankss


@JacksWife678
Thank you!! Hahaha I'm like the worlds biggest hopeless romantic, its actually almost sad hhahah they have like my dream relationship.. ya know just without well, Riley ;)


@Rebecca.Troy
:) got that right, shit is about to HIT THE FANNN but if all goes as planned you should see me Saturday/Sunday as the new updating schedual suggests :)

You dont know how happy I was when I saw this in my inbox. I love this story SOOOOO fucking much. But ohhhh shiiiitttt, it's about to gooooo dooooooowwnnn.... Please update soon, you can't leave me on a cliffhanger. ; - ; xD <3

Okay first..you're an INCREDIBLE author, just wanted ya to know that. <3 and OMFG THEIR RELATIONSHIP IS SO CUTE IT MAKES MY HEART FLUTTER WITH HAPPY FEELS AHHHHHH <333 BUT NOOOOO RILEY GO AWAAAYY

Great chapter going to buy tissues now

@akalexis
hahaha thank you but sadly noo.. i cannot end it here.. plus thatd be a pretty shitty place to end it


@JacksWife678
THE END OF YOUR COMMENT!! HAHAHAHAH but thank you so much.. i try to tap into y'alls feelsies real good with the fluff but i always feel like its shit.. wupps


@liltayves
oh my goodness gracionious!! it does hahahah holly crap