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The Lost Boys

Who are you?

"Seriously Mel, that's nothing to just ignore and it goes away. You need to get that checked." The voice snaps me out of my train of thoughts.

I'm sitting in a car and we are driving or more queuing through the rainy evening New York rush hour traffic. My head leans against the cool passenger window and I am tired as hell.

Switching isn't that painful anymore, I still have this tugging feeling when I change 'sides' but it doesn't fell like my heart is going to be ripped out of my chest, I guess I am getting used to it.

I look over to the driver, he is looking out on the street and concentrates on the stop and go. He has a tanned skin and long brown wavy hair that sticks out from under his backwards turned snapback.

A little silver ring shines in his nose. He is really cute and attractive and I rack my brain for a memory with the two of us. I don't really think when I ask him. "Vic. Right?"

He looks over for a moment. "Yeah?"

He is about to look back on the street when his eyes go wide in shock and realisation. He slams the brakes and we come to a halt in the middle of the road and I hear cars behind us starting to honk.

He completely ignores it and turns me around holding my arm to make me look at him.

"Did you just check my name? Mel! You were forgetting the name of your best friend! This scares the shit out of me. I swear if you don't go and see a doctor tomorrow I will drag you to the hospital no matter what, I am not gonna sit and watch you fall to pieces. Fuck! Mel! Doesn't that scare you?"

That's when I lose it. I start screaming at him although I know it's not his fault. "Yes. YES. It fucking scares me shitless Vic. What do you think! Do you believe I find it funny being tossed around between memories or whatever you wanna call it, losing your friends and the people you love because you can't remember. DO YOU THINK THATS FUNNY? REALLY VIC?"

He looks at me in shock, I think it is because of my outburst but then he reaches out and touches my face and whispers.

"Mel, your nose is bleeding."

Notes

Sorry this is short but I am already on the next chapter. So please comment and let me know you're still there and what you think about it. Luv y'all. :))

Comments

Awww, I'm glad to hear that. That was my point with leaving it. <3
And I totally understand. I admire you for finishing it, really, and having the will to do so and just considering how the readers might feel if it wasn't. I'm glad you did wrap it up; like I said, while there were some things I wondered about, it was still a good ending by letting us know essentially what was going on and letting us know what ended up happening to Mel.
So no worries. :)

Nanook Nanook
1/6/17

@Nanook
You have no idea how happy your comment made me. I fully understand your reasoning and I had planned this story to be longer and more detailed but as time went on I felt there was not a lot of interest from the readers and somehow that made me loose my confidence. So I brought the story to an end pretty quickly just so I wouldn't let you guys hanging with an unfinished plot. (Cause that drives me crazy when it happens to me). Anyway thank you so much for your review it made my day ☺️

T-what T-what
1/6/17

Hello.
So I just stumbled across this story. Don't ask how I found it cause I honestly don't know. XD
But oh my god. This story... I can't believe it didn't get more recognition. It was seriously... amazing.
Not only was there a unique plot line, but you kept it going, leaving us on edge with what was going on with the main character, and just... wow, it was seriously so awesomely written. You're a really great writer, and a creative person for working with this concept.
I had a feeling from the beginning that it probably dealt with death (just from the whole Peter Pan in general conspiracy theory, which may have inspired you, maybe not... where Neverland is seen as a heaven type of thing, and that's why they never grow older). But, wow, you definitely changed it up a bit by making her still be alive in the process, like not making her already dead and in a type of heaven. And that made it unique with switching back and forth between the realities.
The only thing that I'm left wondering about, is what was Mel's past? Why was she no longer with Alex? How did her relationships build with each of the people? Although I guess some of it can be assumed, I would have liked to have read more into that, just to show how connected she was with them, and why it was even more significant in her other reality. But that's really it. And I mean, I guess with the way the story works, with us reading alongside her not knowing, it kind of made sense that it went this way. But idk, may be something to consider to write about someday. Although, don't get me wrong, it's amazing as is and I understand if you don't want to mess that up.
But yeah, I just wanted to leave a comment letting you know that I really enjoyed this, even two years after you posted it. Great job with it. This is the first story in a long time that's made me cry. A sad ending, but happy at the same time since she was finally at peace.
I again can't believe this story didn't get more recognition, you deserve more and if I had read it while you were updating, I definitely would have commented frequently and gave feedback. Unfortunately, that didn't happen, so I'm hoping my long comment now makes up for that, lol.
I will definitely have to check out some more of your stuff. <3

Nanook Nanook
1/6/17

@thetrekkie
Awwwww, thank you. Well I had a couple of filler chapters in my mind and I know there are a few loose ends in the story that I should have resolved but honestly, it was the best I could do at the moment. So yeah. Bye and love you. X

T-what T-what
9/21/14

WHAT THE HELL D: I didn't expect that at ALL! Kinda sad that it's over but I'm really happy that I was able to read this :)

thetrekkie thetrekkie
9/21/14