A new kind of love

Sorry but I did not get very far into your fanfic. There were many errors in the writing that could quite easily be solved by proofreading and quite frankly, I find that off-putting. I was immediately tempted to click away when reading the mere description given all it's errors. I am making you aware of this because I am trying to help. Your description serves as an advertisement in that it's purpose is to say "Hey doesn't this sound interesting? Keep reading to hear more!". By correcting some of the mistakes in it, you can increase your number of readers because they will not click away from the story for this reason like I almost did. Here I will display some of the corrected mistakes with asterisks:
I*'*m just a care free girl, oops sorry *I* misspelled that*.*

I'm a slut*.*

*N*o I don't pity myself and I don't want yours*.* I am a slut*;*
*I* sleep around with men *and* never call them back*.* I'm a slut *as* simple as *(I'm assuming "that" is supposed to go here)* *.*

then in the first chapter:
"he *thrust* into me" thrusted isn't a word.
There were others later on but I'll just leave it at that. I'm honestly just leaving this in the hopes that you will use this information to improve. Much of these little errors are quite easy to fix such as capitalizing "I" (which I noticed you didn't on multiple occasions). Also there is no space prior to commas and periods. Ex: "Sally went to the store to pick up eggs, milk, and cheese." This suggests that English is not your first language in which case good for you for possessing the ability to be multilingual. I know I could never write a fanfiction in a language other than my first so kudos in that regard.

Of course!

@RemberingNeverland

nahh, it's okay. :D

@that_band_nerd
:3

sorry for leaving it to long

Story's back <3