A Love Like War - Comments, page 2

@Jagk
It's okay. It's a good plot twist if it can make someone cry. At least in my opinion

@Jack Bakarat
I'm sorry my writing makes you cry ;-;

@Jagk
Hmmm. I don't know. Maybe because something really sad always happens which makes me come close to crying or in Welcome To Dulaney High's case start crying

@Jack Bakarat
Why does my writing always cause you emotional trauma? xD
Every single story! xDDD

The emotional trauma of chapter 63 :'(

@JayRamsay4L
Aww thank you<33

@Jagk

Of course I'll check it out! You two are two of my favorite authors and I'd love you see what you two come up with <3

@JayRamsay4L
Right! It's only been two weeks, we worked non-stop on it.
We will be having a new story come out tomorrow! If you wanna check that out ^~^

I can't believe this is over, it feels like just yesterday I was reading this story for the first time and I just can't believe how far this story has come in like what 2 weeks?

@Ness
Glad you like it!

@JamieAllOver.
It's not bother me. I was just saying that I'm okay with it. We understand it needs some editing, but it's not a novel that we are trying to put up for sale or anything. It's a fanfic. It's not suppose to be perfect. We're just having fun, and we appriacte the feedback, but really, the story has one chapter left and then it's over, so we don't really care at the moment.

I love this story so many twists and turns has you holding your breathe ☺

i know it's my opinion. it wasn't supposed to bother you either. it was just to give constructive feedback that said something other than "omg this is soooooo good!!!"
the first thing i learned in creative writing classes is that u gotta give all the info on ur characters in the beginning, then begin the story. it should also hook ur reader and make them want to continue. i'm just givin stuff to work on in the future.
i'd consider editing more too. a lot of extra commas, missing words, misspelled words, etc. it got distracting after a while.

@JamieAllOver.
If you don't like it, then that's your opinion c:
But, most of that stuff is filled in, in later chapters.
But it's all your opinion and I'm okay with that ^~^
Thanks for the thoughts though!

i don't think i like this tbh???
like i only read up to like chp 20 smth, but there are so many flaws and plots holes and????
was it ever actually established that jack smokes?? and his parents are his "best friends," but he only truly grieves for maybe 20 minutes?? and then has sex w his bf?? on school property?? where both sex and smoking are highly illegal and they'd be arrested?? and jack wouldn't live alone bc he's seventeen, he has no job, etc?? like they would call a god father or mother or another relative and if there wasnt one they'd have to put him in a home until he turned 18??? and i figured there would be a lot more about lacrosse but instead there's this random overused depression/self harm route taken?? and in the process of like ten chps there's two breakups??? it doesn't feel very thought through and p rushed negl.
idk i just think it could use a lot of work.

@Ness
Just have to wait and see ;)

Nooooo I really hope Jalex get back together

Yes, very happy, thank you.

The feels are real ;-;

I'm supposed to be listening to my physics teacher but here I am, reading on my phone instead of paying attention to our lesson.