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@Evie
Ahh okay I get it :)
I really hope I didn't sound mean. If I didn't like your story I wouldn't have bothered. I just thought it was good enough for me to point out.
@we-forgot-monday
Hey :) I kind of wanted that to be the point. Jasey seems so perfect and everyone seems to like her so much that her downfall is how possessive she becomes over everyone. How they're her boys and no one else's unless she totally approves of them. I read a lot of fanfiction where the female is 'perfect' in a way and I wanted to try push that in a different way where her perfection and popularity is her downfall. For example, how she can't choose between Alex or Jack but still expects both of them to hang around for her and not move on, which ultimately all comes from her insecurity but we haven't got there yet ;) I'm starting to focus more on that side of the story now as its coming toward the end but I thought I should just put that out there and I'm really do apologise if it's unclear! The story did begin with a lack of character put into Jasey which I'm trying to slowly fix up through both the chapters coming up and the prequel.
Thanks for your comment!
I really don't mean to sound bitchy or mean but why does everyone like Jasey so much? What has she done? She seems kind of perfect, which seems kind of unrealistic. I haven't finished the story yet but does she have any flaws? Also why are they all her boys? Is no other female allowed to be a part of their lives but Jasey? This story is well written and there are certain parts of it that I really like, its just that those things don't really make sense. I really hope I didn't hurt your feelings or anything like that, because I am in no means a perfect writer, but I hope its like constructive criticism.
Oh come on. You can't just leave me hanging there. Omg!!! What the Hell happened to Alex what is happening?!?!?
@SarahBethBarakat
I can guarantee you that is a thing. I've seen it happen haha. Have fun with your head!
Oh, my sweet lord and baby jesus, mother of god, what the flying fuck just happened!? IS THAT EVEN A THING!? My mind has been fucked. I don't even know what to do with myself.
@AllTimeJonah
WELCOME TO THE FAMILY! I'm glad you're liking it :) Well we'll just have to wait and see. The next chapters taking a while because its a bit tricky to write and quite a bit longer :)
wow it took me so long to read all this x) But it was so worth it it's really good i keep worrying that the kids won't be jack's and it'll probably upset me a lot xc
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Prequel first please <3 :)
10/25/14