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Without the Love

Sorry for the Times



She stared at the crack in the sidewalk, watching the shadows dance across the dull pavement with an ache in her chest stronger than any pain she had ever known. It slowly filled the cavity of her chest, spread out to her fingertips and immobilized her legs. She couldn’t form words, couldn’t pick her head up to face him, to face their shocked audience. She knew the look on his face, the way he stood with his hands in his pockets, passive, emotionless.

The words came, but not without first having to be chased out by a choked on sob. “If…if that’s what you want.” She choked on words that fell feeble, like rocks, between them. Her hands trembled as she took the ring off her finger and unlatched the chain around her neck. She could feel Jack, Zack, and Rian, having formed a close knit circle around them, staring in open mouthed confusion. She could hear the fans, in a hushed discomfort, shifting from foot to foot and craning their necks to see. No one had seen this coming.

He stood, hands on his hips, watching the melodramatic scene play out with a look of open disapproval on his face. She knew what he was thinking, that she was being over dramatic, a child, a brat. She was embarrassing him. He didn’t say a word.

“I’ll have my stuff cleared out by the time you’re done.” She said as she dropped the remnants of their love into his outstretched palm. Entirely uncomfortable.

“I know.”

She turned, without another word, and pushed past Zack and Rian, walking with her head as high as she could hold it and her shoulders square. Rian tried to grab her hand, tried to stop her, but she pulled it away and continued on. Bodies parted like the red sea for her as she moved, numb, eyes dry and heart splintered.

It wasn’t until she was past the tour busses that the tears began to flow, silent and untouched. She didn’t touch them, didn’t try to stop their flow; instead, she disappeared into the cooling night as on lookers, friends and strangers alike, mourned the loss of her future alongside her.

Notes

Hi guys!
It's been a while since I've been on this account; I used to write under the username drearyrose but have been unable to get back into the account, despite weeks of trying. So I figured I would open a new one and touch up one of my favorite works!

Let me know whatcha guys think by leaving a comment or giving me a vote/subscribe!

Thank you for reading!

x.o.x.o. M.T.


Comments

Wowwww... I am so late, but I am here. I'm so sorry for the delay in commenting!
I haven't really gotten on here as much lately. Life stuff. :/ And just, trying not to be so absorbed with the internet lately. I've gotten on social media a tad but I'm trying to take more breaks from it.
But I wanted to take some time to sit down on here and catch up with what I've missed, so here I am. :)
Cute interlude. <3 Their first kiss, aw. A bit scandalous, though, with the age gap, but at least they didn't rush into things. It's sweet how he was so confident in being with her, but then it changed. :( What happened?
I'm hoping following this comment I don't take forever to lead feedback again. Sorry about that, and looking at the comments, I take it you've probably waited since no one else has left feedback yet. :/ But I'll be here as much as I can be.
Oh, and in response to your author's note: Simple Creatures! YAAASSS, am I right? :D
Interested in seeing more. :)

Nanook Nanook
2/18/19

OMG, you leave me a shout-out and I take FOREVER to comment again. I'm so grateful for it though. *sobbing emoji* :'( I feel so bad, I'm sorry girl for taking so long.
But great job with this second part. Ooof, I hope Alex is okay, ugh; I hate when someone falls and that hit on head thing is described. XD lol, that's so random, but I cringed.
Hmm... Alex is still feeling things. As well he should. Like anyone else reading, the biggest question is why did he end things? Especially since it seems like he regrets it. Sigh. My prediction is fear of commitment, but it would be interesting to see if something else is factored in. Like, maybe someone said something to him, and that made him think about their relationship (stupidly, but, still ponder it). Like, I could see something like that happening and that making him make a split-second decision and thus, the regret now and realizing he made a huge mistake.
To answer your question on the conversation, I mean... it was civilized? Didn't seem too bad, but they didn't really say much, so maybe that factor is saying something. Obviously, Jack doesn't hate him as much as Macaria does, since he's taking the time to talk to him. Or well, now, anyway, maybe it was different after things initially happened.
Anyway, great job with the update! I love that you love Demi too! :D She is my fav. :D Next to Cassadee Pope (which, is probably sacrilegious at this point with also loving ATL/being in the ATL fandom, but, you know, who cares XD). I'm also happy that Demi's out of rehab and just got a Grammy nom with Christina like OMG. :')
Anyway, lol, back on topic: excited to see what you have next in store! Hopefully I won't take as long to comment again, sigh. I've just been dealing with stuff lately, so sorry if it does. But I'll try my best to get on here sooner. <3

Nanook Nanook
12/12/18

Yay, an update! Hmm... so, I don't think you got to updating again as soon as you expected, assuming I'm thinking right on the timeline when you posted this, lol. But that's okay, because I'm only just now catching up. XD So sorry girl. :/
Anyway, great job with the update! Love how you used Demi's song as inspiration; she is my fav. :D And the song is definitely accurate in this story.
Great depiction when describing the new bar/restaurant. I can definitely visualize how it looks, so I wanted to commend that because sometimes writers often struggle with describing the scene in fan fics. So awesome job with describing. :)
I'm not sure if this is a mistake, but something that I reread that had me wondering, lol:
He was tracing the rim with long fingers, the shading of a large tattoo on his hand visible as he finger swiped.
"he finger swiped" or "his finger swiped"? Because reading it again, "he finger swiped" could make sense, reading it in a present tense sort of way. Sounded a bit awkward though when I first read it. But it may have been intentional, not sure. In which case, completely disregard this note if it was lol.
It makes me sad that she broke down when she wanted to stay strong. :( Aw.
I'm not mad at Jack for not telling her; it's very clear why he didn't, with just what we know from the backstory. I don't blame him. And then hearing her reaction definitely emphasizes siding with him more.
Great job with the update! Interested in hearing Alex's side of this, and more from Jack. :)
Also, that's awesome that you're doing NaNoWriMo. I did it one year when I was in high school, haven't since because it stressed me out too much trying to balance that and school. XD But now that I'm out of high school and college I may try it again one year. Definitely commend you for doing it while balancing college, 100x more stressful than trying it in high school I'm sure. But yeah, I understand being busy, so if it takes you a while between updates, I totally understand.

Nanook Nanook
11/22/18

Great job with the update! Short but to the point. Apologies for the delay in commenting; I've had a hectic time the past few weeks. This may happen occasionally, hopefully not all the time right after you update... but know I will always get around to commenting like I am now. :)
In response to your last comment:
Oh, gotcha. XD No worries, and you can totally change it to an a on the end, since it's your story. Like that part is up to you. I just wanted to check with that because I wasn't sure how accurate you were planning on being with names.
And oh, okay, I see you briefly covered him in this new update as well; was just wondering since I didn't know if he would maybe be a new love interest or something. But figured it would be explained at some point.
<3
As for the new update, great job with it! :) I don't have much to comment on since it was just kind of a brief moment, but this part:
Macaria cursed, creatively, for a third time, as she struggled to close her yellow umbrella under the fabric eaves outside of Matthew’s Pizzeria, her older brother Derek and all the ways she was going to destroy him when she got home.
I think you maybe want to add "on her mind" after "Derek" or after "home." Or maybe I'm just not reading the sentence right? XD Hopefully this makes sense; it just seems like a piece is missing from this sentence for it to make sense lol. Maybe it's just my tired mind though, idk.
But anyway, I love how you made this Halloween-themed; it fit for when you posted it and now I feel so bad for taking so long to comment, sorry again! But loved reading this little snippet and excited to see more! :)

Nanook Nanook
11/12/18

@Nanook
If we’re being completely honest she’s Isobella and not Isobel it’s because I typed isobel and that I spelled her name wrong so I went back and changed it (thank you for catching it!)
Derek is Macarias older brother - that’s about all I can say about him for right now but he does play an integral part in the story.
The dynamic between Alex and his parents is going to be explored later on, as is the dynamic between Macaria and them. I wanted to emphasize just how badly Alex is screwing up though. So your reaction is reassuring that his mistakes are evident!
thank you as always for the read and you’re amazing attention to detail ❤️

RosesNWriters RosesNWriters
10/31/18