Sanctuary - Comments

Okay, so wow... it's been a minute. First of all, thank you for responding to my last comment. I promise that the reason my feedback took so long is simply because I've just had a hectic life lately, and so I've had little time to read.
I'm glad my feedback is helpful.
And since it's been a minute, this took me forever to catch up on, and now that I have.. it's over! :O But there's gonna be a sequel, so yay! I assume I'll get some sort of notification for that, but I'm not entirely sure... if you don't see me leave feedback within a week, feel free to let me know it's posted.
Alex and Abby are so cute together. :') And I can't believe Miranda and Jack are gonna have a baby. :O That threw me for a loop when you added that in. And it was interesting to see how she coped with him being on tour, since I was wondering how that would go... it went better than I thought it would. :) That's a good thing, though.
And then that brief fight with her mom, wow. But I'm glad they made up. And I'm glad Abby got the wedding she was hoping for. :)
Interested in seeing what you have happen in the sequel. I really enjoyed this story. I loved how strong Alex and Abby's relationship is; through thick and thin they were there for one another. <3
Anyway, yeah, I'll be around to read the sequel... hopefully it doesn't take me as long again to leave feedback. Finally caught up though. And again, appreciate you getting back to me after the last comment.
Looking forward to the sequel!

It’s sweet how patient Alex is with her when she falls in and out of her meltdowns. I just hope she can keep it together long enough while he’s away. :)

@Nanook
I do read your commentary and I truly appreciate it. With multiple stories I've written on Mibba, I hardly get any comments, so thank you! They're quite helpful! Now, where do I start? Oh! I've never been sure on the correct spelling of fiancee and I wasn't even thinking about his actual anniversary which I just checked is on the 9th, so that was a happy coincidence. And when I accidentally responded to another reader, I did actually mean to respond to you. I apologize.

Hmm... I've lost track on what update my comment was last on? lol, sorry for the delay in feedback, but I'm caught up finally!
lol, the Ravens vs. Redskins debate. My mom loves the Redskins, and when she wore one of their shirts in Baltimore, she was practically annihilated. XD Like oh my God, so much hatred was thrown. XD Like don't do that unless you want a death sentence. LMAO.
And note, when calling Alex her fiancé, it would be with one e, not two. However, if you refer to Abby as his fiancée, that's when there's two. It's a rule in French with masculine/feminine. With males, it's one e, and then females have the second. Who knew my French minor would ever come in handy? XD
Anyway, great job with all of the updates! It was cute how she surprised him with his parents on his birthday. :) And I'm trying to recall, but is Alex's real anniversary on the 23rd? Just found it ironic that you also chose April. Although I'm having trouble recalling if that's the exact day... and I'm too lazy to look it up tbh. XD
Interested in seeing more!
Please respond to this comment letting me know you're actually seeing my feedback? I'm not one to usually complain about this sort of thing, but I just kind of find it a bit insulting when I don't hear back from the author, especially when they're updating regularly. You don't have to respond to me every time, I know that can get a bit redundant, but it's just... I've asked questions occasionally, or made comments that could have had a response... and I just feel like my feedback is going ignored. I'm sure that's not the case, but this will also keep me commenting in the future. It'll just help reassure I'm not leaving comments just for nothing. And the one time you commented, actually technically @ responded to another reader, and I'm still not sure if that was a mistake or if you literally just ignored me.
I just like to know if my comments are helpful or not. If they're not, I'll stop commenting or if I still don't hear back, I can't guarantee my feedback from now on with this story.

Aw, haha, this was a cute update. :)
I loved how they were able to talk about the future and agree on it. That just shows how perfect they are as a couple.
And the fight for candy? SAME. Especially if it's the freaking good stuff, I mean are you kidding? Those bags are so expensive, you have to try to keep some! XD
But yeah, enjoyed the new chapter and can't wait for more! :)
P.S.- A thought that just occurred to me: was Alex dressed up in a costume too? Or just Abby? I was just wondering... his costume wasn't mentioned, but they took a picture together, so it makes me wonder if he did have one on in that case...

Oohh girl so sorry for the delay in leaving feedback! Hectic life happenings, it's been fun.
Great job with the new updates! I'm glad that Abby resolved things with her mom. :) Sad that they had to be separated again, though. :/
But ooohh those steamy scenes following after. ;) lol I always feel so awkward commenting on them, sorry I can't be more constructive there. XD
I find it interesting that Alex and Abby haven't seen each other drunk before now? Or wasted, however you want to classify it; again, since they've been together a bit... but, idk, I guess circumstances could have prevented.
But something I loved about the birthday chapter: even though they got drunk, nothing scandalous happened. Like, they didn't cheat or flirt with other people. I feel like that's honestly the go-to in most fanfics, so great job for not going with the classic route on that. It surprised me. But at the same time, why would that happen with them? Since they don't seem to be having any problems, there isn't really a reason to.
One thing I will point out that I also mentioned in the last comment... a bit of a confusion with dialogue, again.
Chapter 15:
“Wanna hear the rest of my day?” I asked as I laid my head on his chest.
“Absolutely. We did do a lot of shopping and eating. We ate at our restaurant.”
The way this looks, it sounds like Alex is saying he did the same thing Abby did. Does that make sense? Hopefully. I think again it just might have been an error with separating the quotes/dialogue.
Chapter 16:
“Looking forward to this, Mom?”
“Definitely. Warning: Jack is unpredictable. I need to let you know that now. Alex knows that better than I do.”
Again, it looks like Abby's mom is clarifying how Jack is, even though she hasn't met him yet... I believe it was Abby supposed to be saying this but it seemed like her mother still since it's all within the same quote following Definitely.
This was probably just the same thing that happened before, so no worries if it wasn't intentional, but just wanted to mention those again so that it hopefully doesn't happen in the future, so that things are clear.
Hmm... it makes me happy that Alex loves when Abby's happy. lol, random thing to point out, but it's true. :) Another aspect of their relationship that I enjoy. He does what he can to make her happy.
I'm not sure if maybe she's waiting... but in the last chapter you mentioned how she would discuss the wedding with Alex. Did they maybe discuss it outside of telling us in the story? Just wondering since two months went by, if that was still in the plans of happening soon.
But anyway, just expressing my thoughts. Great job overall with all three updates. Interested in seeing more. :)

Hmmm... have I mentioned before how I love how Alex seems to unconditionally love her? :') It's really so sweet.
Great job with the new updates! So it seems to be going somewhat well with her mom so far, other than that last little argument. But, it's better than before, right?
lol, something I saw:
“This place is gorgeous.” she said in awe.
“Thank you. How long have you being living here, Abby?”
Like Abby is thanking her, but then Abby's being talked to? I'm thinking you probably just forgot to break up the dialogue here, so no big deal, but it confused me for a moment. XD
Alex's unconditional love being said, it would be interesting to see if he ever has a moment where he breaks. It's great that he's so understanding of Abby, and I guess if he didn't know he had to deal with that, he wouldn't be with her... but, sometimes it just seems like she overreacts a tad. Like, with the heat thing... if it were that big of a deal, how does she even put up with living in Los Angeles when that's the average weather over the summer? XD Again, it's very understanding with what she's been going through, but I just find it odd that Alex is so easy-going about it, you know? You would think he would break more, but idk. Or like get annoyed more, I guess? It just doesn't seem normal that he's always so chill about it. Although he did break at that one point outside the studio, so I guess you did touch on it a bit.
Also, something else I'm wondering about... what'll happen when he has to eventually tour? Like how will Abby cope with that? I just wonder since she seems to rely pretty heavily on him... and like, what did she do before, for past tours? :/ But perhaps this is in the plans to discuss.
Loved that you put the cooking in the one chapter, haha, not sure if my feedback inspired that or not but I thought it was cute. :D
Interested in seeing what's next. :)

lol, I always miss so many updates between comments. XD My bad.
But, hey, I kind of like having three or four to binge at once, instead of just one, it keeps the story going more. :)
Girl, your saucy writing... if you get what I mean, is great. Keep it up. Sorry, I often feel awkward talking about this type of thing, lol. Something I wonder, though, idk if this is getting too personal, but it needs to be asked... do they use protection? Is Abby on the pill? I'm just wondering, because like, otherwise she would get pregnant, right? lol. Logically speaking. Although maybe that's an idea to come. :D
Two other things I was questioning a bit:
I found it a bit weird, considering they've been together two years... and Abby has never been in the studio with him? Or to the studio, etc. I mean, I guess maybe it makes sense with her job, but... since they finally found the time, I would think they would've had it at some other point... or wait. There is the gap between albums, maybe that was it, lol. I just kind of found it odd that she only just now saw it, two years into their relationship. That's not entirely necessary to be explained, I guess, but maybe something possibly to mention.
But another thing I found extremely unsettling... she's this gourmet chef, right? And she ATE A FROZEN DINNER. XD Isn't that like, blasphemy in the cooking world? LMAO. Although I do understand the lazy nights, but I was just a bit taken aback when I read that, because like, you would think if she's a chef, that would probably be gross to her. This is getting nit picky, though, I realize... but just something to keep in mind since that's her career, and that could actually add more detail to the story, like, explaining the food she prepares, etc.
Okay, so, other than these two things, general feedback: I'm glad her rapist was found guilty. How horrid that would've been if he wasn't. Then Alex and her had a fight... aw. :/ But glad that they made up. :) It just shows a normalcy to their relationship, though, so that's good; not everything is perfect.
Hmm... then Abby being a bit off in this latest update, aw. :( I hope she's able to get better. It was kind of scary reading that.
Hope this was good feedback. :) Looking forward to reading more. I seriously don't intentionally wait for three or four updates, though, lol, you just kind of update pretty quickly so it's a bit hard to keep up, but just know I'll get to them eventually if not right away, lol.

Great job with the three latest updates! Sorry it took me a minute to comment.
I love how unconditionally Alex loves her. I feel like I don't see that type of unconditional-ness in a lot of stories, if that makes sense. It's really sweet, though. :)
Something to note with italics on here: you can actually change the font in the toolbar, as opposed to doing the [i] [/i] like you have to do on Mibba. I'm not entirely sure how it works with posting the actual story, but for instance, I can italicize in my comment. I'm thinking there's a toolbar right above where you're putting the type. I mean, this isn't overly critical, but just for future reference so that the [i] stuff isn't there, you know? It's confusing how you have to do that on Mibba though, for sure.
But anyway, it's great how you're taking the time to explain her situation, and not just move past all the traumatic stuff. I mean, I know that's the point of the story, to show how it affected her, but usually the temptation is to skip past that, so kudos for actually writing it out.
Interested in seeing more. :)

@Newyork_xo
@dreamerforever
And haha, yes. Thanks for pointing that out girl. XD
But glad the feedback is helping. :)

Great job with the new updates! :) I see you added the characters to the summary page... I'm glad you did because I was wondering how we should be picturing Abby.
Alex is so sweet to her. :') Hmm... wonder how the trial is going to go. :O That's intense that it caused her first panic attack. :/
Interested in seeing more. :)

@Newyork_xo
Oops! Sorry.

@dreamerforever
You’re welcome! But I think this reply was for @nanook. :)

@Newyork_xo
I just wanna thank you for the comments, including where I could fix parts of the story. I truly appreciate them!

Damn. What an interesting point she’s at in her life. On one ha d, she’s engaged to the man she loves and the other, she has to face that awful man in court. I hope the second doesn’t negatively affect the first. :(

Two new updates! :D Woot!
Great job with both chapters. Hmm... something to note: when you go back and forth with dialogue more than say, four lines, it might be best to finally label one of the lines "Alex said" or "I said" etc. There were a few parts in chapter 3 where I was confused on who was saying what line, cause it could've been either of them, you know? But just something to maybe keep in mind. It's not too big but just something a bit confusing. Again, not necessary for every line, but just when there's more dialogue. I kind of was getting confused also if like, one of them said something two lines in a row? Hopefully this makes sense.
But aw, he proposed! :) That's so sweet. Hmm... wondering what will go down between her and her mom? :O This should get interesting.
Can't wait for more! :)

Hiiii...
I actually checked out the one-shot you posted as well, on Mibba. I went ahead and rated it as well, but check out my actual comment on the other site; feel like it's a bit redundant if I comment here as well.
But in that comment, I mentioned how if you had any other Alex stories, that I would definitely check them out. So here I am. But also, seeing this on the stories main page peeked my curiosity; it just so happened you were also the writer.
This story starts out on an intense note, and while by no means is rape ever justified, I'm glad it didn't go any further and that someone was able to help her. She was still violated, though, and that's definitely not right. :(
Interested in seeing what all you have in store for this. Have a feeling this could be a really good, emotional story. Since the event already happened, I'm wondering how you plan on having things go from here? Hmm...
But yeah, just wanted to leave feedback letting you know you definitely have my interest. :) Will be here to leave feedback if you choose to continue.