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VOID (reposted) - Comments

Ah, that's okay, thanks for taking my feedback into mind. :) That's awesome of you to do... I feel like a lot of writers often ignore me when I make suggestions, lol, or like already have a plan in mind, so they don't bother with changing anything.
But like I said, if this throws things off too much, I can look past it, I just thought it was a lot happening at once, considering the pace of the other chapters. Don't want you to worry over it too much. So, if you're up for rewriting, go for it, but again, I'll be here when you continue either way. :)

Nanook Nanook
3/20/18

@Nanook
Hey, sorry this is so late, I was trying to figure out how to respond the right way. This did put me off a bit, but I completely understand your point. I'd tried to write this chapter about 4 different times, and this idea wasnt very well thought out and I kinda just wanted to put something out there. Switching povs WAS Supposed to bring new information to the story, stuff that Lennon might not be aware of. Alex IS slightly a player and a flirt in this story, but I'd like to think that he wouldn't want to cheat purposely. I' thinking of rewriting it and trying again, maybe without him having a gf this time. Thanks

Hiii... I'm still here, I swear! Sorry for the delayed comment; just have had a hectic time trying to get on here lately to read things.
But anyway... interesting new update. I'm a bit confused though, and maybe this is a warning to be cautious: I felt like this chapter almost belonged to a completely different story. I can understand maybe wanting a switch in POV, but I feel like this chapter is a total divergence to the original story started in Lennon's POV. First of all, the fact that Alex is hiding his other relationship, which comes a bit out of nowhere. Second, that he suddenly sees his ex AND kisses her at a party, after being caught in a near-kiss with Lennon... this also comes a bit out of nowhere. It just... seems like a lot all of a sudden, for one chapter, for the story...
I know you're rewriting though a bit/reposting, so I don't want to discourage you, but just want to give my honest feedback. I'll still stick around to read, and maybe this is just diving into the full concept of the story, just in a quick manner. Idk. But I'm unsure how to feel about Alex's intentions now. Like, the first three chapters he just seemed like this innocent love interest, and now he seems bad. Very bad. I guess maybe what would've been better is if him having someone at home was maybe introduced the second chapter, and then this chapter just being the ex. That could've maybe helped frame it better.
Just want to be honest and hopefully give some helpful/useful feedback. I did still find the chapter great, it was just kind of a lot to take in at once. Like, I feel like there was two or three character developments that should've been spread in say, three chapters, if that makes sense.
But again, not meant to discourage, only want to give you honest feedback. Hope that you continue writing! Interested in seeing more! :)

Nanook Nanook
1/11/18

You're back!!! I'm so glad!!! I love how she can read him so well, that she always seems to know what he is thinking/feeling. Can't wait for more!

hopeless1313 hopeless1313
1/4/18

OMG an update. :O Was wondering what happened with this story.
I'm just excited to get to the new stuff. New stuff! New stuff!! New stuff! XD
But still, great as it was before. :D Interested in seeing what happens next. :)

Nanook Nanook
8/8/17

Oh, gotcha, no worries, I can do that. :)

Nanook Nanook
6/15/17

@Nanook
Yeah if I mess up you can totally point it out to me. I'd prefer if you message me about it tho so we don't consume the comments lol . Again thanks so much for your support, and don't worry I have something special coming up in the next 2 chapters ;)

Yay, another chapter!
I actually keep going back to the original story posted and comparing how you're changing it, lol. You're right; this version is a lot better, and you're adding more to it. So kudos for improving the writing and adding more to it than before. :) This is the last chapter before we get to the really new stuff! I'm excited to read what all you have in store. :)
And no problem! I can do that from now on, if you want, like point out errors I spot? I just never know if I should or not. I know some writers find it annoying, lol.
I noticed in this chapter, there were a few moments with missing quotation marks going on. Such as:
NOW DON'T LOSE YOUR FIGHT KID.”
and here:
I snorted. What?” Alex asked.
But yeah, this chapter was definitely entertaining with them singing along to their own song. XD
Excited to see more!

Nanook Nanook
6/15/17

@Nanook
Yikes, I'm gonna go fix that now lol. Thanks for pointing it out tho, I hate typos :/

I'm glad you're back posting with this story! Can't wait go see if it changes and see what else happens !

hopeless1313 hopeless1313
6/15/17

Still here. :) Not much feedback to give as of yet since this is still the same stuff from the other posted one, pretty much. One thing to note, though:
"Oh sorry, I could hear over the music," I said, shaking my head.
You put she could hear over the music, when in fact she was acting like she couldn't hear, lol. Just a small error, really.
Alex and Lennon are already so cute, aww. lol. Can't wait for more! :D

Nanook Nanook
6/15/17

YAASSS girl.
Thankfully, I occasionally check the stories page when I get on here. It's how I found your first version, and now this new one. :) So I'll be here to read this... either new and improved or simply reposting and continuing? Either way, glad you're picking it up again and not just letting it go. :)
Excited to see what all this will have in store! :D

Nanook Nanook
6/13/17